The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and products.
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Sample Response
The flow chart illustrates the process of cultivating and preparing pineapples and final products for different purposes.
Overall, there are three major stages in total, commencing with plantingplating pineapples and culminating in manufacturing different products according to their sizes. The growth of pineapples requires one year in total.
Initially, pineapple crowns are planted at an interval of 26 centimeters at temperatures ranging from 23 to 30 degrees Celsius. Seven months later, ethylene is sprayed onto the crownsinto crown to promote further growth. Having experienced 12 months, pineapples become fully mature with a length of 30 centimeters and a weight of 2 kilograms.
Turning to stage Bthe stage B, harvested pineapples are washed in water troughsin a basin using water before they are categorized by their sizes. Except for large pineapples, the crowns of small and medium pineapples are removed after which they are peeled. While the former are squeezed into juice in the extractor, the latterlater experience more complex procedures. Peeled medium-sized pineapples are sliced and diced into pieces before being canned in tin canscylinder containers. Additionally, wax is applied to large pineapples. Subsequently, waxed pineapples are packed in crates before being exportedbefore exported to foreign countries.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear and comprehensive summary of the visual data, accurately covering both the agricultural and processing stages with a well-developed overview. Information flows logically through effective paragraphing and sentence linking. To reach a higher standard, ensure precise word choice and refine minor grammatical structures such as passive participle clauses.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All key stages, measurements, and product branches from the diagram are accurately described alongside a clear overall summary.
Ensure overview stage counts directly mirror the main headings in the visual prompt to avoid minor phrasing ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organized by process stages with smooth sequence markers facilitating clear progression throughout.
Vary cohesive devices slightly more to avoid overusing simple temporal transitions at sentence openings.
Lexical Resource
A broad range of process-specific vocabulary is used appropriately, despite a few minor spelling and word choice slips.
Proofread carefully to eliminate typographical errors such as writing plating for planting or later for latter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of complex grammatical structures, including passive voice and participial phrases, are used with high accuracy.
Pay close attention to parallel verb forms and prepositions in non-finite clauses.