The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles.
Sample Response
The diagram delineates the process by which plastic bottles can be reused in the manufacturing of clothing. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there are 3 main stages to this entirely man-made process firstly involving the collection and sorting of bottles, followed by cleaning and processing, and finally the actual production of clothes.
In the first step, plastic bottles of varying sizes are collected and transported to factories. In the factories, the bottles are then sorted and placed in a machine to cut them into smaller pieces. The pieces must then be washed and left in the sun to dry.
The transformative stages begin with boiling of the pieces of plastic which precedes straining. After having been strained, the resulting byproduct becomes yarn which is then ready to be weaved into a fabric. Lastly, the finished rolls of material are used in the fabrication of clothing.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Spell out number Original: 3 Suggested revision: three Why it matters: A small number is conventionally written as a word in formal prose.
- 2. Avoid repetition Original: In the factories Suggested revision: There Why it matters: The location is already established in the preceding sentence.
- 3. Use process passive Original: must then be washed Suggested revision: are then washed Why it matters: The simple passive describes a depicted process stage more directly than must.
- 4. Fix gerund structure Original: with boiling of the pieces of plastic Suggested revision: with the pieces of plastic being boiled Why it matters: Boiling needs a grammatical object or passive construction in this phrase.
- 5. Use accurate process noun Original: byproduct Suggested revision: material Why it matters: Material is more precise because the substance is the intended product of the preceding stages.
- 6. Use past participle Original: weaved Suggested revision: woven Why it matters: Woven is the standard past participle of weave.
- 7. Remove article Original: into a fabric Suggested revision: into fabric Why it matters: Fabric is uncountable when referring generally to the material produced.
- 8. Use natural collocation Original: fabrication Suggested revision: manufacture Why it matters: Manufacture is the more natural term for producing clothes in this process.
- 9. Sentence rewrite Original: Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there are 3 main stages to this entirely man-made process firstly involving the collection and sorting of bottles, followed by cleaning and processing, and finally the actual production of clothes. Suggested revision: Overall, this entirely man-made process has three main stages: collecting and sorting the bottles, cleaning and processing the plastic, and producing clothes. Why it matters: The original sentence is overloaded and lacks clear punctuation before its sequence of stages.
- 10. Sentence rewrite Original: In the factories, the bottles are then sorted and placed in a machine to cut them into smaller pieces. Suggested revision: There, the bottles are sorted and placed in a machine that cuts them into smaller pieces. Why it matters: The original infinitive illogically suggests that the bottles perform the cutting.
Suggested Rewrites
- 3 three
- In the factories There
- must then be washed are then washed
- with boiling of the pieces of plastic with the pieces of plastic being boiled
- byproduct material
- weaved woven
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents the complete sequence accurately, supported by a clear overview and strong chronological organization. Its main limitation is a small cluster of awkward or inaccurate language choices, most notably 'ready to be weaved' and some over-elaborate phrasing; the priority is to retain the precise stage coverage while using more natural process vocabulary and fully controlled passive forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately covers every stage from bottle collection through processing, yarn production, fabric formation, and clothing manufacture.
Refine the overview by stating that the linear process transforms discarded bottles into fabric and finished garments through a sequence of stages.
Coherence and Cohesion
The process is grouped logically and follows the visual sequence clearly, with effective chronological linking throughout.
Streamline the long overview sentence so that the three broad phases are easier to absorb immediately.
Lexical Resource
The response demonstrates broad process vocabulary, although 'byproduct' and some elevated phrases are less precise or natural than needed.
Prefer direct process terms such as 'material,' 'woven fabric,' and 'made into clothing' where they express the stage more exactly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures and passive forms are generally well controlled, with occasional awkwardness and the incorrect form 'be weaved.'
Use the correct participle 'woven' and check article and modifier placement in longer process descriptions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles.
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