The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year.
Sample Response
The column graph gives a projection ofon the next year’s jeans sales of two companies in Turkey, whilecompanies in Turkey while the pie chart compares their projected market shares at the end of next yeartheir estimated market share. Overall, jeans sales are estimated to increase inat the last quarter next year and the Jack & Jones brandJack & Jones brand is anticipated to have half of the market share. According to the first graph, Jack & Jones jeans clothing sale will be roughly 450 thousand pairs in Turkey, which is almost three times higher than that of Mango brand. At end of the first quarter, Jack & Jones is estimated to sell 300 thousand pairs of jeans in Turkey while it would be just above 150 thousand for Mango. In July and August, the demand for Mango jeans is estimated to exceed the demand of Jack & Jones. However, Jack & Jones is likely to experience a risewitness a hike in its jeans salessale during the last quarter of the year, and in Decemberyear and in December it will sell 900,000 pairs, double its January salesdouble than its sale in January. During the last quarter, Mango jeans salesMango jean’s sale would remain almost the same except for a surgeexcept a surge in December to 600,000 pairs600 thousand sales. It is predicted that Jack & Jones alone will control half of the marketthe half of the market share while Mango corporation will have a 30% market sharehave 30% market share. The remaining 20% is projected to be held bywould be controlled by the other jeans manufacturers.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear overview and selects most of the important monthly and market-share comparisons, with the July–August crossover and year-end rise handled particularly well. Its main weakness is precision: the Mango figure at the end of the first quarter is inaccurate, and some descriptions are awkward or insufficiently anchored to a month. Prioritise exact data reporting and cleaner comparative phrasing, supported by more deliberate paragraphing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several well-chosen comparisons cover the main features, although the first-quarter Mango figure is inaccurate and one early comparison lacks a month reference.
Anchor every figure to its month and verify each value against the chart before making comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from the overview to monthly sales and market shares, but presenting the entire report as one paragraph weakens its organisation.
Separate the introduction and overview from two focused detail paragraphs grouping the monthly trends and projected shares.
Lexical Resource
Varied task-specific vocabulary conveys trends and projections clearly, though phrases such as “projection on,” “jeans clothing sale,” and “600 thousand sales” are awkward.
Use more natural chart-reporting collocations such as “a projection of,” “sales of jeans,” and “600,000 pairs.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a useful range of complex sentence forms, but recurring article, preposition, possessive, and comparative errors reduce accuracy.
Edit constructions such as “in the last quarter,” “at the end,” and “double its January figure,” while checking articles and possessives.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year.
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