The chart below shows the percentages of four types of waste that were recycled in a town in 2000, 2005 and 2010.
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The bar chart indicates the proportions of plastic, cans, paper and metal waste recycled in a town in the years 2000, 2005, and 2010respectively in the year 2000, 2005 and 2010, illustrating changes over a ten-year period.which shows the trend of waste recycled over these three years.
Overall, it is clear that the percentages of all four kinds of waste were similarly lowwere at similarly low in 2000 and increased sharply to a peakhave sharply increasing to the peak in 2010. The proportionaccount of plastic and cans waste recycled changed only minimallyjust changed slightly from 2000 to 2005, while paper and metal waste recycled experienced apparent growthhad apparently growth, especially metal recycling.especially the metal one.
In 2000, cans, paper and metal waste recycled had similar percentages, ranging between 12% and 14%with over 10% and under 15%. The plastic accounted for the lowest shareaccounted the lowest at 10%. After 10 years, the proportions of all types of waste recycled increased dramatically. Metal reached a peak of 40%The metal was up to the peak at 40% of waste recycled, followed by the cans waste at nearly 35% recycled, and paper and plastic were the third and fourth type of waste being recycled at under 30% and exactly 25% respectivelyrespectively by under 30% and slightly over 25% in 2010. Although the plastic only shared around 25% of waste recycled, it was still more than the sum of its percentages in 2000 and 2005.
In comparison, as the only typethe only one special type of waste among these four, the cans waste recycled proportion had a percentage similar to the other three types of wastehad similar percentage with other three types waste, but decreased slightly in 2005, and then surged to become the second highest proportionquickly returned to rock to the second highest proportion at nearly 35%by slightly under 35% in 2010, more than paper and plastic, just behind the metal.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The summary successfully highlights the main overall trends and accurately reports key figures across the given years. However, frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing reduce the clarity and fluency of the description. To improve, focus on mastering correct verb structures and refining prepositional phrases used for describing trends.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and major features are identified and supported with accurate numerical figures from the chart.
Ensure all general descriptions match the data precisely, avoiding slightly inaccurate generalizations about overall peaks.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into paragraphs, though some cohesive transitions feel slightly repetitive or clumsy.
Use clearer, more natural linking expressions to contrast categories without over-complicating sentence connections.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient variety of vocabulary is used to describe changes, though there are noticeable instances of awkward word choice.
Replace incorrect word selections like account with amount or proportion when referring to uncountable data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Multiple grammatical errors in verb tense, agreement, and structure occur throughout the text.
Review complex verb structures and participle forms to ensure tense consistency when comparing historical data.