The table below shows information about three different types of restaurants.
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Sample Response
The table compares the costs of lunch and dinnercosts of the lunch and dinner and shows the average time people spendspent while having lunch and dinner in three different types of restaurants. A glance at the graph reveals that the cost of lunch is less expensive than dinner served at a restaurant. According to the table data, the meal price in a sit-down restaurant, cafeteria and fast food restaurant varies. When comparing the cost of the restaurant, dinner is more expensive than lunch in a restaurant. The mealsmeal served in these three types of restaurantsrestaurant have one thing in common – customerscustomer spend more time inon a restaurant when the meal is more expensivewhere the meal is expensive. For example, people spend only 20 minutes at a fast-food restauranton a fast food restaurant eating lunchfor the lunch and it costs them less than 5 dollars while a 45-minute lunch45 minutes lunch in a sit-down restaurant costs 10 dollarsdollar. Interestingly, people spend more time in a restaurant during their dinner than they do while having their lunch. On averageOn an average, they spend 15 minutes longer eating dinner15 minutes more during dinner except in a fast food shop. Meals in a sit-down restaurant areThe meals in a sit-down restaurant is more expensive than that of a cafeteria and fast food restaurant. For instance, dinner in a sit-down restaurant costs as high as 17 dollarsdollar which is more than three timesmore than thrice than the price of dinner in a fast food shop.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response selects the main cost and time patterns well and supports them with accurate examples, including the sit-down and fast-food figures. Its clearest weakness is language control: missing paragraph breaks, repeated statements, agreement errors, and awkward forms such as unit plurals reduce polish. Group the overview and details into separate paragraphs, then check agreement, articles, prepositions, and measurement expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main relationships between meal cost, restaurant type, and time spent are accurately identified and supported with well-chosen figures.
Include a concise comparison involving the cafeteria so that all three restaurant types receive balanced coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a generally logical comparative sequence, but the single unbroken paragraph and repeated cost observations weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs, grouping cost comparisons in one and time comparisons in the other.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of comparison and measurement vocabulary, though several collocations and prepositions are awkward.
Use natural forms such as at a restaurant, on average, three times the price, and a 45-minute lunch.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the data clearly, despite recurring errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and comparatives.
Correct forms such as customers spend, meals are, 10 dollars, and more than three times the price.