The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
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The two planspictures compare the layout of a school as it was in the year 2004 with a projected layoutproposed site design for the year 2024.
Overall, the primary planned development for 2024It is clear that the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new school building. The school will then be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students.
In 2004, there were 600 enrolled studentspupils attending the school, and the two school buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1,0001000 pupils, and a third building will be builtwill have been constructed. Furthermore, the plan is to connect the two original buildings with a new corridor or extensionjoin the two original buildings together, creating a shorter path that links the combined buildings to the new third buildinglinks the buildings only.
As the third building and a second car park will be built on the site of the original sports field, a new, smaller sports field will need to be relocated to the south-east cornerlaid. The existing road will also be extended eastwardA new road will also be built from the main entrance to the second car park. Finally, no changes will be made to the main entrance and original car park.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay provides an outstanding description of the map changes, featuring a clear overview, highly accurate comparisons, and logical paragraphing. A sophisticated range of grammatical structures and map-specific vocabulary is used accurately throughout. To reach the very highest band, the candidate could incorporate compass points for even greater geographical precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All key features and changes between the two dates are accurately highlighted with a clear overview.
Incorporate directional language such as compass points to make spatial descriptions even more precise.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically across clear paragraphs with cohesive linking throughout.
Vary cohesive devices slightly more to avoid relying on standard sequence markers like 'finally'.
Lexical Resource
A wide and natural range of vocabulary specific to map descriptions is used with high accuracy.
Include additional location-specific collocations such as 'situated in the south-eastern corner' to enhance lexical sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex grammatical structures, including passive and future perfect forms, is produced accurately.
Maintain this high standard of grammatical accuracy while experimenting with complex participle phrases.