The chart below gives information about Someland’s main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025.
Sample Response
This bar chart illustrates the performance of Someland’s primary exports in 2005 and 2015. It also indicates future projections for 2025. According to the data, it seems likely that international tourism will become the dominant industry, although dairy exports will remain strong. In 2005, we can see that tourism was the greatest exports earner of the three industries, with revenue standing at just over $6 billion.
This figure has increased slightly, so that now, in 2015, it has reached almost $7 billion. It is estimated that international tourism will continue to grow, so that by 2025, it will be earning around $8 billion for the country. In 2000, dairy exports were worth around $5 billion, but since then there has been a dramatic increase, and sales for this year are approximately $8 billion. Experts are predicting that exports in this area may fall slightly, so a figure of $7.5 billion is expected for 2025. Meat products are the third key industry in Someland, but sales have dropped since 2000 and now stand at $3.5 billion. It is expected that sales will continue to decrease in the future.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Describe measured value Original: performance Suggested revision: value Why it matters: The chart specifically measures export revenue in billions of dollars.
- 2. Limit the claim Original: will become the dominant industry Suggested revision: will become the largest export category Why it matters: The chart compares export values rather than the industries' overall dominance.
- 3. Fix noun phrase Original: greatest exports earner Suggested revision: largest export earner Why it matters: Export should be singular when it modifies earner, and largest is the natural comparative term.
- 4. Correct source year Original: 2000 Suggested revision: 2005 Why it matters: The first year displayed in the chart is 2005.
- 5. Name value precisely Original: sales for this year Suggested revision: dairy export revenue in 2015 Why it matters: This removes the ambiguous time reference and identifies the measured export category.
- 6. Attribute projection correctly Original: Experts are predicting Suggested revision: The chart projects Why it matters: The visual presents a projection without identifying experts as its source.
- 7. Name category directly Original: exports in this area Suggested revision: dairy exports Why it matters: The specific category is clearer than the vague reference this area.
- 8. Correct year reference Original: sales have dropped since 2000 Suggested revision: export revenue has fallen since 2005 Why it matters: The graph compares meat-product values from 2005 onward.
- 9. Sentence rewrite Original: This figure has increased slightly, so that now, in 2015, it has reached almost $7 billion. Suggested revision: This figure increased slightly to almost $7 billion in 2015. Why it matters: The rewrite gives the time sequence more concisely and consistently.
- 10. Complete the overview Suggested revision: Add that meat-product exports are projected to decline across the period. Why it matters: This supplies the main contrasting trend alongside the growth in tourism and the strength of dairy exports.
Suggested Rewrites
- performance value
- will become the dominant industry will become the largest export category
- greatest exports earner largest export earner
- 2000 2005
- sales for this year dairy export revenue in 2015
- Experts are predicting The chart projects
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview and tracks all three export categories with fluent, well-controlled language and logical progression. Its main limitation is the repeated use of 2000 instead of the chart’s 2005 baseline, alongside the omission of the projected final meat figure. Correct the time references first, then complete the meat comparison with its 2025 value so that every reported trend is anchored accurately.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the principal future pattern and all three categories are covered, but the baseline year is twice misstated and the final meat value is omitted.
Replace both references to 2000 with 2005 and report meat products falling to about $3 billion in 2025.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses clearly from the overview into category-based detail, with cohesive referencing used effectively despite a very long second paragraph.
Divide the detail into two balanced paragraphs, grouping the growing tourism category separately from dairy and meat.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of generally precise vocabulary describes trends and projections, though phrases such as greatest exports earner are slightly awkward.
Refine collocations by using forms such as largest export earner and revenue from dairy exports.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used flexibly and accurately, with only occasional minor wording or agreement slips.
Proofread noun modifiers and number agreement, especially constructions such as export earner, while retaining the strong sentence variety.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below gives information about Someland’s main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025.
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