The table below shows the percentage of first-year students who gave a “very good” rating to the resources provided by a college for three courses.
This response is estimated at Band 6.0. Can you write a better one?
Write yours and get clear feedback on all four criteria.
- Closest to official scores
- What to fix on each criterion
- Feedback in about 20 seconds · free
Sample Response
The table compares student satisfaction levels across five college resource areas for three different academic subjectsillustrates the percentage of first-year students who gave a “very good” rating to the resources provided by a college for three courses.
Overall, Commercecommerce ranked first among other courses. Economics had the lowest proportion of 'very good' ratings for pre-course informationlowest "very good” rating proportion of pre-course information and other resources , while Lawlaw had the lowest "very good" rating proportion of teaching, tutor and resources(print).
Commerce gained the highest rating of "very good" among all the categoriescatogries. In pre-course information, it recordedearned 95%, 36 percentage points higher than the figure for Economicseconomic, while Commerce and Economicswhile commerce and economics both stood at 95% in teaching. Moreover, commerce's print resourcesresources(prink) also ranked first at 85%, 15 percentage points higher than the figure for law.
Regarding other resources,Although in other resources, the figure for economics was 20 percentage points lower than the corresponding figure for law, standing at 60%, the rating for teaching was 95%its proportion of teaching had 95%, 33 percentage points higher33% higher than the figure for law.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively highlights key comparisons from the table and includes a clear summary overview. However, coverage of specific categories like tutors is omitted, and minor grammatical inaccuracies slightly impair phrasing precision. To improve, ensure all categories from the visual data are systematically covered while maintaining strict grammatical accuracy when describing percentage differences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies key trends and provides a clear overview, though it leaves out data for the tutor category entirely.
Ensure all main categories listed in the visual prompt are addressed systematically in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information is organized into distinct paragraphs with a logical progression, though transitional phrasing is occasionally abrupt.
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link comparisons smoothly across body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally appropriate for describing task data, but spelling errors and minor word choice slips are present.
Proofread carefully to eliminate typographical errors such as prink and catogries.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted with reasonable control, though some awkward phrasing occurs when stating figures.
Practice phrasing data structures cleanly to avoid awkward expressions like proportion of teaching had 95%.