The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice-producing countries in the world in 2015.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the first ten countries (China, India, Indonesia, Bangladesh, Vietnam, Thailand, Burma, Philippines, Brazil and Japan) for Rice growth in the world in 2015. The X-axis depicts the Rice produced in thousand tons, and the Y – axis depicts the list of the top ten countries. Overall, China grows the highest rice production among the other countries.
Among the ten nations, China grew the highest quantity of Rice, with more than 145 thousand tons of Rice in 2015, whereas India produced 115 thousand tons of Rice, standing in second place in the list. While Indonesia is in third place with turned out 35,000 tons of rice grains, Bangladesh is slightly less with 33,000 tons respectively, and Vietnam is in fifth place and produced 30,000 tons of Rice in 2015.
Furthermore, Rice generated by the remaining countries were less than 20,000 tons. Brazil and Japan processed an equal amount of quantity of with12,000 tons of Rice in 2015.
In Conclusion, the top ten countries that produced Rice in the world in the year 2015 are visualized in bar chart form, China is in first place, and India is in Second place, approximately.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use ranking term Original: first Suggested revision: top Why it matters: Top ten correctly indicates that the countries are ranked by production.
- 2. Name the measure Original: for Rice growth Suggested revision: by rice production Why it matters: The chart measures production rather than the growth of rice plants.
- 3. Use chart label Original: the Rice produced Suggested revision: rice production Why it matters: Rice production is the concise measure represented on the horizontal axis.
- 4. Use plural unit Original: in thousand tons Suggested revision: in thousands of tons Why it matters: The unit label requires the plural form thousands of tons.
- 5. Remove wordiness Original: the list of the top ten countries Suggested revision: the ten countries Why it matters: The shorter phrase accurately describes the category labels on the vertical axis.
- 6. Fix verb combination Original: grows the highest rice production Suggested revision: produced the most rice Why it matters: A country produces rice; it does not grow a production figure.
- 7. Clarify comparison group Original: other Suggested revision: ten Why it matters: This wording includes China within the complete group being compared.
- 8. Use production wording Original: grew the highest quantity of Rice Suggested revision: produced the largest quantity of rice Why it matters: Produced the largest quantity is the appropriate collocation for the chart data.
- 9. Report value accurately Original: more than 145 thousand tons of Rice Suggested revision: approximately 145 thousand tons of rice Why it matters: The bar ends at roughly 145,000 tons rather than clearly above that value.
- 10. Correct India figure Original: 115 thousand tons of Rice Suggested revision: approximately 105 thousand tons of rice Why it matters: India's bar reaches about 105,000 tons in the chart.
- 11. Condense ranking phrase Original: standing in second place in the list Suggested revision: ranking second Why it matters: The shorter phrase states the ranking clearly without unnecessary wording.
- 12. Repair verb structure Original: is in third place with turned out Suggested revision: ranked third, producing Why it matters: The original sequence combines incompatible verb forms.
Suggested Rewrites
- first top
- for Rice growth by rice production
- the Rice produced rice production
- in thousand tons in thousands of tons
- the list of the top ten countries the ten countries
- grows the highest rice production produced the most rice
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the dominant position of China and India and organises the figures into higher and lower producers. However, coverage is incomplete and several values are inaccurate, most notably India's output and the claim that Brazil and Japan produced equal amounts. The highest-priority improvement is to select a fuller set of comparisons and check each figure carefully, while avoiding repetitive introductory and concluding material.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A basic overview and several leading figures are provided, but important countries are omitted and multiple values or comparisons are inaccurate.
Report accurate approximate figures for a representative range of countries, including Thailand, Burma and the Philippines, and distinguish Brazil from Japan.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable structure and generally moves from higher to lower producers, though the conclusion largely repeats earlier information.
Use the final paragraph for an additional comparison or remove it, and group the lower-producing countries more systematically.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing a chart, but frequent inaccurate collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Use standard combinations such as 'produced rice', 'recorded the highest output' and 'an equal amount' with careful variation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex sentences are attempted, but agreement errors and malformed clauses recur and occasionally strain readability.
Check subject-verb agreement and rebuild fragments such as 'with turned out' and 'an equal amount of quantity of with12,000'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice-producing countries in the world in 2015.
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