The map shows a popular tourist destination in a city in 2000 and 2010.
This response is estimated at Band 5.0. Can you write a better one?
Write yours and get clear feedback on all four criteria.
- Closest to official scores
- What to fix on each criterion
- Feedback in about 20 seconds · free
Sample Response
TheseThis given maps show the changes in the layout of a travel destination in a city from 2000 to 2010.Overall,it is clear that theretheir were some transformations in city facilities Deletethroughout in this decade.
In 2000,there waswere a heritage railway located in the easteastern.On the top of the destination,a long river was long river running through.In the centrecentral of this destination,a gift shop waswere located,and there were some trees south of the shopunder the shop.The toilet was located in the northeast of the gift shop.
Looking at the tourist destination design in 20102015,Many new facilities had been constructed .The gift shopship had been converted in to a sculpture,and more trees had been planted in the same place.A new guardrail had been built around the river.The toilet was still located in the same locationlocated the same location,but a cafe had been built next to it.The heritage railway had remained unchanged,while a hotel had been constructedhad constructed to the west of the railwayin front of the railway,and it was a car park whicha parking which was located to the northlocated the north of the hotel.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response successfully identifies the key transformations shown on the maps, such as the introduction of new facilities and modifications to existing ones. However, accuracy is compromised by factual misstatements, including misreading the year 2010 as 2015 and incorrectly using grammatical forms throughout. To improve, double-check dates and labels against the visual prompt and focus on subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main key features and overall changes are addressed, but there are inaccuracies in reporting data, such as misidentifying the year 2010 as 2015 and minor errors in positional descriptions.
Ensure all dates, labels, and compass directions from the prompt are accurately transcribed and reported in your descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged chronologically into separate paragraphs, but sentence-level transitions are sometimes mechanical or missing spacing after punctuation.
Improve cohesive devices between contrasting features and maintain standard spacing after full stops and commas.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic map changes, but noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and word formation occur regularly.
Review spelling and appropriate prepositional phrases for map descriptions, such as avoiding repeated typos like 'ship' for 'shop'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent grammatical errors in subject-verb agreement, relative clauses, and passive construction distort clarity.
Practice correct subject-verb agreement and basic passive voice constructions for reporting changes over time.