The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways.

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Sample Response

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The bar graph displays data on tourist arrivals in New ZealandNew Zealand's tourists from three countries in 1999 and 2009. The line graph presents information about two types of holiday accommodation and travel stylestwo activities tourists did while on vacation.

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Overall, New Zealand experienced a rise in tourists from the UK and the USthe US, whereas numbers from Japan dropped. Tourists generally preferred to stay in New Zealand's resorts, although backpacking becamehad become just as popular at the end of the period.

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Tourists to New Zealand from the UK and US both increased by 2009. In 1999, a million visitors were from the UK, while 800,000 came from the US. A decade later, the figures for both countries jumped: to 1,600,000jumped:1,600,000 for the UK and roughly 1,500,000 for the US. The number of Japanese visitors, however, decreasedJapanese visitors, however, decreased in the same period. From a high of 1,500,000 in 1999, Japanese visitors to New Zealand fell to around 1,100,000 in 2009.

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As for how tourists spent their time in New Zealandenjoyed their New Zealand vacation between 1999 and 2009, most preferred to stay at a resort. In 1999, around 1,700,000 visitors stayed at resortswere checked in. Figures rose to about 2,400,000 in2004 before falling to approximatelyjust 1,100,000 in 2009. On the other hand, backpacking grew steadily in popularitybecame a trend, as approximately 250,000 tourists backpacked in 1999. The numbers increased nearly fourfold until 1,100,000 backpacked in New Zealand in 2009, similar to those staying in resorts.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The essay presents a well-structured summary of both charts, accurately describing trends and highlighting key data points with minimal errors. The primary strength is its clear logical organization and precise reporting of the visual data. To reach the highest band, minor typographical errors in spacing and punctuation should be eliminated.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The response presents a clear overall overview and accurately details key figures and trends from both visual prompts.

Next step

Ensure data comparisons between the two charts are fully integrated where relevant to provide deeper analytical synthesis.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

Paragraphing is logical and ideas progress smoothly using a range of appropriate cohesive devices.

Next step

Vary cohesive transitions further to avoid relying on standard signals like 'as for' or 'on the other hand'.

LR

Lexical Resource

8.0
Scoring rule

A good variety of lexical items is used flexibly and precisely to describe data changes and activities.

Next step

Incorporate a wider range of sophisticated vocabulary for describing statistical shifts and comparisons.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0
Scoring rule

A wide range of complex grammatical structures is produced with high accuracy throughout the text.

Next step

Pay close attention to spacing and punctuation formatting after colons and before years to maintain flawless presentation.