The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year.
Sample Response
The bar chart shows the estimated sales of jeans in thousands of pairs for two companies in Turkey next year.
It is anticipated that purchases of jeans at Mango Co. will rise from 150,000 pairs in January to approximately 500,000 pairs in August, and will remain there until November. For December, sales are expected to be in the region of 600,000 pairs.
Meanwhile, it is estimated that the sales of jeans for Jack & Jones Co. will begin the year at around 450,000 pairs in January, falling to about 250,000, before increasing to around 400,000 in June. For the next two months until August, sales are forecast to remain steady at this level, after which they are expected to rise steadily to hit a peak of approximately 900,000 pairs in December.
The pie chart shows that, at the end of next year, the anticipated market share for Mango Co. and Jack & Jones Co. is 20% and 30% respectively.
As can be seen from the chart, the overall sales trends for both companies are forecast to be upwards.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use correct time preposition Original: For Suggested revision: In Why it matters: Use in with a month when identifying when sales occur.
- 2. Add the month Original: falling to about 250,000 Suggested revision: falling to about 250,000 in February Why it matters: Naming February makes the low point directly traceable to the chart.
- 3. Correct the trend Original: steadily Suggested revision: overall Why it matters: The figures plateau from September to October, so the increase is not steady.
- 4. Use natural trend wording Original: are forecast to be upwards Suggested revision: are forecast to rise overall Why it matters: Rise overall is the natural verb phrase for the projected trend.
- 5. Sentence rewrite Original: It is anticipated that purchases of jeans at Mango Co. will rise from 150,000 pairs in January to approximately 500,000 pairs in August, and will remain there until November. Suggested revision: Mango Co.'s jeans sales are forecast to dip from 150,000 pairs in January to about 120,000 in February, then climb to approximately 500,000 by August and remain at that level through November. Why it matters: The rewrite uses the correct sales term and includes the initial February decline shown in the chart.
- 6. Sentence rewrite Original: The pie chart shows that, at the end of next year, the anticipated market share for Mango Co. and Jack & Jones Co. is 20% and 30% respectively. Suggested revision: The pie chart shows that Mango Co. and Jack & Jones Co. are projected to hold 20% and 30% of the market respectively, while other companies account for the remaining 50%. Why it matters: The rewrite fixes the agreement problem and reports the omitted largest segment.
- 7. Move the overview earlier Suggested revision: Place this overview immediately after the introduction so readers see the main trends before the detailed figures. Why it matters: Earlier placement would improve the report's information flow.
- 8. Add the main comparison Suggested revision: Add that Jack & Jones is projected to finish with much higher December sales and a larger market share than Mango. Why it matters: This comparison captures the clearest relationship across the two visuals.
Suggested Rewrites
- For In
- falling to about 250,000 falling to about 250,000 in February
- steadily overall
- are forecast to be upwards are forecast to rise overall
- It is anticipated that purchases of jeans at Mango Co. will rise from 150,000 pairs in January to approximately 500,000 pairs in August, and will remain there until November. Mango Co.'s jeans sales are forecast to dip from 150,000 pairs in January to about 120,000 in February, then climb to approximately 500,000 by August and remain at that level through November.
- The pie chart shows that, at the end of next year, the anticipated market share for Mango Co. and Jack & Jones Co. is 20% and 30% respectively. The pie chart shows that Mango Co. and Jack & Jones Co. are projected to hold 20% and 30% of the market respectively, while other companies account for the remaining 50%.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is strongest in its clear, accurate description of the monthly sales trajectories, supported by well-chosen figures and controlled language. Its main limitation is incomplete synthesis of the visuals: it gives little direct comparison between the companies and omits the largest pie-chart segment, the 50% share held by others. The highest priority is to build the overview around those cross-series comparisons and the complete market-share picture.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The monthly trends and both companies' market shares are reported accurately, but direct comparisons are limited and the 50% Others segment is omitted.
Include the largest pie-chart category and highlight when Jack & Jones leads, when Mango briefly overtakes it, and how their year-end sales differ.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced, clearly paragraphed and smoothly connected from one company and visual to the next.
Place a fuller overview immediately after the introduction so the detailed paragraphs develop its principal comparisons.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of precise trend vocabulary is used naturally, with only a few slightly awkward choices such as purchases at a company.
Prefer sales by a company and continue varying forecast language without sacrificing precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex time clauses, participial structures and passive forecast forms are handled accurately, with only rare minor lapses.
Keep compound subjects and their verbs consistently plural, especially when reporting the two market shares together.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year.
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