The pie chart gave information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 Billion.
Sample Response
The yielded pie charts demonstrate the USA authority released and spending money in 2000. AED 315 billion was the total amount.
Overall, the majority of money spent on social security while for transport least money released.
For law and order sector USA government spent AED17 billion; however, roughly below half of that budget was for transport. AED 100 billion was released to the social security field, which had more than a quarter proportion. 53 billion AED was for health and personal social services. Debt interest and other expenses had the same released fund on account of 23 billion. Furthermore, just 1 billion less money was for defence than debt interest.
The spent 15 billion and 13 billion AED was for housing heritage and environment field and industry agriculture & emoluments, respectively. The education department had 38 AED billion released funds.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add required articles Original: For law and order sector Suggested revision: For the law and order sector Why it matters: The specific named sector requires the definite article.
- 2. Correct the country Original: USA Suggested revision: UAE Why it matters: The chart concerns government spending in the UAE, not the USA.
- 3. Make comparison accurate Original: roughly below half of that budget Suggested revision: just over half that amount Why it matters: Transport received AED 9 billion, which is just over half the AED 17 billion allocated to law and order.
- 4. Use spending vocabulary Original: was released to the social security field Suggested revision: was allocated to social security Why it matters: Allocated is the appropriate verb for distributing a government budget.
- 5. Correct proportion phrase Original: more than a quarter proportion Suggested revision: more than a quarter of the total Why it matters: A quarter of the total is the correct grammatical expression for this share.
- 6. Order the currency correctly Original: 53 billion AED Suggested revision: AED 53 billion Why it matters: The chart consistently places the currency abbreviation before the amount.
- 7. Match the category label Original: expenses Suggested revision: expenditure Why it matters: Other expenditure is the category name used in the visual.
- 8. Describe equal allocations Original: had the same released fund Suggested revision: received equal allocations Why it matters: This phrase clearly expresses that the two categories each received the same amount.
- 9. State both amounts clearly Original: on account of 23 billion Suggested revision: of AED 23 billion each Why it matters: Each is needed to show that the stated amount applies separately to both categories.
- 10. Clarify the comparison Original: just 1 billion less money was for defence Suggested revision: defence received AED 1 billion less Why it matters: The revised structure directly and grammatically compares the two allocations.
- 11. Repair subject and agreement Original: The spent 15 billion and 13 billion AED was Suggested revision: AED 15 billion and AED 13 billion were spent Why it matters: The two amounts form a plural subject and require were spent.
- 12. Name the sector accurately Original: housing heritage and environment field Suggested revision: housing, heritage and the environment Why it matters: This wording reproduces the sector label clearly and with appropriate punctuation.
Suggested Rewrites
- For law and order sector For the law and order sector
- USA UAE
- roughly below half of that budget just over half that amount
- was released to the social security field was allocated to social security
- more than a quarter proportion more than a quarter of the total
- 53 billion AED AED 53 billion
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the largest and smallest allocations and reports nearly every category with figures that largely match the chart. Its coverage is weakened by being slightly under length, repeatedly naming the country as the USA rather than the UAE, and presenting most details as a list with limited comparison; frequent language errors also reduce clarity. The priority is to correct the context and group the spending categories into meaningful comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies the main extremes and most figures are accurate, but the country is misidentified and the short response offers limited comparative selection.
Refer consistently to the UAE and compare the largest allocations with the medium and smallest spending groups while meeting the 150-word minimum.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognizable introduction-overview-details structure, though the detail paragraphs mainly list categories and some references are awkward.
Group related amounts together and use clear comparison links to show which allocations were similar, higher, or lower.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers the topic, but ‘released’ is repeatedly misused for spending and several noun phrases are inaccurate or awkward.
Use precise phrases such as ‘allocated,’ ‘government expenditure,’ ‘accounted for,’ and ‘the smallest allocation.’
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence structure limit grammatical accuracy.
Practise complete comparison sentences with correct articles and passive forms, such as ‘AED 100 billion was allocated to social security.’
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart gave information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 Billion.
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