The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
Sample Response
The line graph illustrates the percentage of UK adolescentsratio of young UK population who followedhave followed a vegetarian diet from 1960 to 2020from the year 1960 till the present time. A glance at the graph reveals that the percentages of young British, who were vegetarians, kept on increasing till the '80s and then witnessed a steady decrease. After the year 2000, this percentage generally increasedthis ratio also kept on increasing. In detailNow getting back to the details, about 7% of adolescents5% adolescent in the UK had a vegetarian dietsome sorts of vegetarian diet in 1970 and the percentage then increased steadilythis ratio steadily increased until 1980till the year 1980. At that time, the proportiontheir ratio in the UK reached its peakwas the highest, over 15%. However, the percentages of vegetarian adolescence in this country gradually decreased and reached to the bottom in around 1997 with just 3%-3.5%. After 2000, the percentageAfter the year 2000, the percentage of juvenile vegetarian again rosekept on going up and despite minor fluctuationswith some minor fluctuations, it reached around about 11%12 percentage in 2019in the year 2019. Finally, in 2020, approximately around 13% of British young generation are vegetarians.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response captures the overall rise, fall, and later recovery and identifies the early-1980s peak, so the principal shape of the line is clear. Its main weakness is numerical precision: the late-1990s low is closer to 4%, and the 2019–2020 level is about 11%, not 12–13%. Prioritise checking values directly against the axes, then refine recurring noun-form and agreement errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main phases and peak are accurately selected, but the trough and especially the final values are overstated.
Report the low at roughly 4% in the mid-1990s and the final plateau at about 11%, while noting the minor fluctuations.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and chronological detail create clear progression, although the single paragraph and conversational transition weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from a detail paragraph covering the rise to 1980 and another covering the decline and recovery.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate language for trends and approximation, but repeated inaccurate noun choices reduce precision.
Use consistent terms such as "percentage of adolescents", "vegetarians", "a low point", and "approximately 11%".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of clauses is attempted, but plural forms, agreement, articles, and tense control are frequently faulty.
Proofread quantified noun phrases and keep past tense for historical values while using the present only for the chart itself.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
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