The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.
Sample Response
The table compares the expenditure sharesexpense ratios of British adults and childrengrown up and younger English on four items as proportions of their incomeproportionate to their earning in 2005. Overall, adult UK residents spent the largest percentagesspent most percentages of their income on food and electronic devices while children’s expenditure was mostly for music and video. To illustrate, an average British adultan average adult English spent over one-fourth of theirthe income on food in 2005 while 15 percent of the income was spent on electronic equipmentwent on purchasing electronic devices. Their spending on music and video waswere quite low, only 4% and 2% respectively. Interestingly, men spent 21% of their incomeearning on electronic gadgets, which was exactly three times that of womentreble than that of women. However, women spent larger shares on food and musicspent more on food and slightly higher on music. But their expenditure on videos was negligiblealmost ignorable proportionate to their income. Children, on the other hand, spent only around one-tenth of their income on food while a large ratio on music and electronic equipmenttools, 41 and 35 percent respectivelypercentages consecutively. Youngsters expense proportion on video was much higher than that of adults, more than 7 times to be more precise. Among those children, boys spent most proportion of their income on video and electronics, 20 and 28 percentages sequentially, while girls preferred more ratio on food and music.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is logically sequenced and supports its account with many correct figures, especially for adults and overall children. Its main limitation is inaccurate selection and comparison: the overview overstates children's video spending, women's music spending is not higher than men's, and music is actually boys' largest category; prioritise verifying each claimed ranking against the table before writing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The table is substantially covered with many correct figures, but the overview and several subgroup comparisons misidentify important rankings.
Correct the overview to highlight children's music and electronic spending, then verify the women-versus-men and boys' category comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a sensible adults-to-children sequence and uses clear referencing, although the single paragraph and occasional abrupt linking reduce control.
Place the overview in its own paragraph and organise the adult and child comparisons into two distinct detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Trend and comparison vocabulary is varied, but frequent unnatural expressions such as 'younger English,' 'ignorable,' and 'preferred more ratio' reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as children, negligible proportion, spent a higher percentage, and respectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear and some complex sentences are attempted, but agreement, possessive, article, and sentence-completion errors occur regularly.
Check every clause for a finite verb and revise forms such as 'adults' spending,' 'children's expenditure,' and 'three times that of women.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.
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