The Pie Charts Below Show the Percentage of Housing Owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007.
Sample Response
The given Pie Charts depict the percentage of accommodation in terms of owned and rented in Great Britain in the two specific years:1991 and 2007.
In 1991, owned homes were obtained highest proportion than any other types of accommodation, with just over a half(55%). And In 2007, the trend was similar for owned homes, which constituted a significant proportion just below three-quarters(70%). In contrast, the rate of social housing in 1991 was only 10 %; however, it was decreased in 2007 by a tiny fraction (5%).
Interestingly, the rate of private renting homes was similar in both the years, which constituted roughly 15 percentage. In 1991, the percentage of Social renting home was second highest after the homeowner, which was 25%, whilst in the year of 2007, the numbers decreased slightly by 10%.
Overall, It can say that the number of houses was increased from 22 million in 1999 to 27 million in 2007. In the UK number of house owners was high in both the given years. But, inhabitants were not preferred to live in social houses.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct comparison structure Original: owned homes were obtained highest proportion than any other types of accommodation Suggested revision: home ownership accounted for a higher proportion than any other type of accommodation Why it matters: The revision uses the correct verb and comparative construction.
- 2. Correct 1991 share Original: just over a half(55%) Suggested revision: about three-fifths (60%) Why it matters: The 1991 chart shows home ownership at approximately 60%.
- 3. Remove faulty opener Original: And In 2007 Suggested revision: In 2007 Why it matters: The sentence does not need the coordinating conjunction, and “in” should not be capitalised mid-phrase.
- 4. Use proportion term Original: rate Suggested revision: proportion Why it matters: “Proportion” is more precise for a category's share of the pie chart.
- 5. Correct 1991 figure Original: only 10 % Suggested revision: about 6% Why it matters: Social housing accounts for roughly 6% in the 1991 chart.
- 6. Use active change verb Original: it was decreased Suggested revision: it decreased Why it matters: “Decrease” is intransitive here and does not require the passive auxiliary.
- 7. State final share Original: by a tiny fraction (5%) Suggested revision: to about 2% Why it matters: The social-housing share fell to approximately 2% in 2007.
- 8. Use correct modifier Original: private renting homes Suggested revision: privately rented homes Why it matters: The adverb and participle correctly describe homes rented privately.
- 9. Remove extra article Original: both the years Suggested revision: both years Why it matters: No article is used between “both” and the plural noun in this structure.
- 10. Correct value and unit Original: 15 percentage Suggested revision: 11 percent Why it matters: Private renting represents about 11% in each chart, and the unit is “percent.”
- 11. Use natural category name Original: Social renting home Suggested revision: socially rented homes Why it matters: The adverb and plural participial phrase correctly name this housing category.
- 12. Compare category shares Original: second highest after the homeowner Suggested revision: the second-largest category after home ownership Why it matters: This wording compares proportions and names the tenure category accurately.
Suggested Rewrites
- owned homes were obtained highest proportion than any other types of accommodation home ownership accounted for a higher proportion than any other type of accommodation
- just over a half(55%) about three-fifths (60%)
- And In 2007 In 2007
- rate proportion
- only 10 % about 6%
- it was decreased it decreased
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response reports the dominant rise in home ownership and several other figures, and its category-by-category comparisons are generally easy to follow. The main limitation is unreliable accuracy: private renting is misreported, the first year is mistyped, and the final claim about residents' preferences is unsupported. Check each category and year carefully, then present a factual overview of the principal shifts.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main ownership trend and several values are covered, but inaccurate private-renting data, a wrong year, and an unsupported interpretation weaken achievement.
Verify all four categories against both charts and replace the claim about residents' preferences with a precise summary of the numerical changes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a generally clear introduction-detail-overview structure, although some comparisons are loosely connected and the overview arrives only at the end.
Place the overview immediately after the introduction and group declining rental categories together to create a clearer progression.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but recurring collocation and word-form errors reduce precision and naturalness.
Use standard expressions such as accounted for, percentage, total number of homes, and fell by ten percentage points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, comparison structures, passive forms, and punctuation reduce control.
Check every clause for a clear subject and verb, then correct article use and avoid unnecessary passive constructions such as was increased.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Pie Charts Below Show the Percentage of Housing Owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007.
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