The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
Sample Response
The following line diagram depicts trips to and from Great Britain in a 20-year span, and the bar chart provides the information on most visited nations by UK residents in 1999. Overall, visits abroad by UK residents have overseen a massive increase compared to the otherwise. On the other hand, the most popular nations visited by UK residents are dominated by countries from Europe.
In the line graph, the initial counts of visits by UK residents abroad and vice versa started initially with 10 million visits each in 1979. Over the years, the trend distinguished differently. Between 1979 to 1999 the visits abroad by Great Britain citizens rose significantly. By 1999, the number of visits quadrupled compared with the twenty-year prior. On the other hand, the number of journeys by UK residents abroad only doubled by 1999.
The next graph shows that there are five countries listed as the most popular destinations for Great Britain citizens. Four countries come from Europe, and the other one hailed from North America. France is the most visited nation with over 11 million UK visitors, followed closely by Spain with 9 million trips. Their European compatriots, Turkey and Greece, amassed about 2 and 3 million journeys, respectively. At the same time, United States notched a respectable 4 million visits considering their geographical range from the UK. Their 4 million visits, if totalled those with those South European countries, are still a bit shy of French’s 11 million visits.
If those two graphs were compared, the massive number of visits abroad by UK residents in the former might be affected by a large number of visits to European and North American nations in the latter. Other than that, the most noticeable comparison is the second chart’s total of visits still higher than first graph’s visits to England, Northern Ireland, Wales, and Scotland by citizens from another country.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix the noun phrase Original: provides the information on most visited nations Suggested revision: provides information about the countries most visited Why it matters: Information is uncountable here, and the revised word order clearly identifies the destinations.
- 2. Describe the rise Original: have overseen a massive increase Suggested revision: increased substantially Why it matters: Visits can increase, but they cannot oversee an increase.
- 3. Name the comparison Original: compared to the otherwise Suggested revision: compared with visits to the UK Why it matters: Otherwise does not identify the second series in the line graph.
- 4. Clarify the overview Original: are dominated by countries from Europe Suggested revision: are mostly European countries Why it matters: Countries are the destinations themselves, so this construction states the pattern directly.
- 5. Fix the time range Original: to Suggested revision: and Why it matters: Between pairs with and when expressing a range.
- 6. Use natural demonym Original: visits abroad by Great Britain citizens Suggested revision: visits abroad by UK residents Why it matters: UK residents is the natural and chart-consistent term for this group.
- 7. Clarify the reference Original: the twenty-year prior Suggested revision: the figure in 1979 Why it matters: The original noun phrase is ungrammatical and does not clearly name the comparison point.
- 8. Identify the chart Original: The next graph Suggested revision: The bar chart Why it matters: Naming the visual directly creates a clearer transition between the two displays.
- 9. Use concise structure Original: there are five countries listed as Suggested revision: shows five countries as Why it matters: The replacement removes the unnecessary existential construction and completes the sentence naturally.
- 10. Fix tense and wording Original: the other one hailed from North America Suggested revision: the fifth is in North America Why it matters: The chart reports a present classification, and hail from is unsuitable here.
- 11. Name the destinations Original: Their European compatriots Suggested revision: The other European destinations Why it matters: Countries shown on a chart are destinations, not compatriots of France and Spain.
- 12. Use neutral reporting Original: amassed about 2 and 3 million journeys Suggested revision: received about 2 and 3 million visits Why it matters: Received and visits are more precise, neutral terms for destination totals.
Suggested Rewrites
- provides the information on most visited nations provides information about the countries most visited
- have overseen a massive increase increased substantially
- compared to the otherwise compared with visits to the UK
- are dominated by countries from Europe are mostly European countries
- to and
- visits abroad by Great Britain citizens visits abroad by UK residents
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both visuals, provides a recognizable overview, and reports the destination rankings with mostly accurate figures. Its main weakness is precision: the description confuses incoming and outgoing travel in one key comparison and adds speculative, unhelpful conclusions, while awkward language sometimes obscures meaning. Prioritize accurate series labels and concise, factual comparisons drawn directly from the graphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Both visuals are covered and most destination figures are accurate, but the response mislabels a key line-graph trend, gives an imprecise starting comparison, and includes unsupported speculation.
Track the two line-series labels carefully, report their correct approximate start and end values, and omit speculative links between the graphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear paragraph structure and generally moves from overview to each visual, but repetition, confused referencing, and the final speculative paragraph weaken progression.
Use one focused paragraph per visual and end after the key factual comparisons instead of adding an unclear cross-chart conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a fairly broad vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate or strained choices such as 'overseen,' 'compatriots,' and 'geographical range' reduce precision.
Choose conventional graph-reporting vocabulary and avoid expressive language that adds evaluation rather than factual description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is an attempt to use varied complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, prepositions, comparison structures, and clause formation sometimes impede clarity.
Use shorter comparative sentences and proofread constructions such as 'from 1979 to 1999,' subject-verb agreement, and possessive forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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