The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.
This response is estimated at Band 8.0. Can you write a better one?
Write yours and get clear feedback on all four criteria.
- Closest to official scores
- What to fix on each criterion
- Feedback in about 20 seconds · free
Sample Response
The table presentsThe table gives information about the number of visits tothe number of people who visited the UK from 2003 to 2008, as well as the average duration of their stay and amount of money they spent during their visitswhilst there.
Overall, the figures for all measuresstatistics grew over the time period, except for the average duration of stay which declined slightly.
In 2003, the UK received approximately 24.7 million visitors who spent around £11.9 billion. The number of visitors rose each year and peakedcontinued to rise each year until peaking at approximately 32.8 million in 2007, beforeand dropping slightly to approximately 31.9 million in 2008. Total spending also rose in most yearsThe amount of money spent also rose most years, peaking at £16.3 billion in 2008.
The average length of visitors' staysduration that visitors stayed in 2003 was 8.2 nights, while they spent an average of £475 per visit. The average number of nights per visit rose slightly until 2006, before declining to an average of 7.7 nights in 2007 and 2008. The average amount of money spent per visit tended to fluctuate each year, but peaked in 2008 at £511.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is concise, well organised, and consistently accurate in its presentation of the principal figures and overall directions. Its main limitation is that the overview slightly simplifies the fluctuating pattern in average spending per visit and the detail focuses heavily on endpoints. The highest-priority improvement is to distinguish overall growth from year-to-year fluctuation and highlight one or two informative intermediate changes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview and accurately selects key values for all four measures, though some intermediate variation is compressed.
Clarify that average spending per visit fluctuated despite ending higher, and include a salient intermediate comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion
The progression from overview to total figures and then per-visit measures is clear, logical, and easy to follow.
Strengthen the link between the overview and details by grouping the two fluctuating measures more explicitly.
Lexical Resource
A strong range of precise trend and measurement vocabulary is used naturally with only slight repetition.
Replace repeated uses of average and peaked where possible with equally precise alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures are varied and controlled, with accurate complex clauses and punctuation throughout.
Refine the slightly awkward phrase the average duration that visitors stayed into a more concise noun phrase.