The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.
Sample Response
The number of tourists in the UK and there are summarized spending between 2002 to 2008 is given by the table the number of visitors is in millions, and the amount spent by them is in the billions also table illustrates the average Knights spent by the visitors.
It can be seen from the table that the number of visitors was increasing significantly from 24.715 million to 32.778 million from 2002 to 2007, but in the year 2008, it was decreased in very low amount and stabled at 31.88 million. Moreover, the amount spent by these tourists was fluctuated between 11.855 to 16.323 pound billions between 2003 to 2008. Although the maximum amount was spent in the year, 2008 was 16. Three hundred twenty-three pound billions and minimum were only 11.855 pound billions in 2003.
Furthermore, we can see that the average amount spent per visitor has also fluctuated from 466 to 511-pound billions. And highest Spent per visit was 511 pound billions in the year 2008. We can observe that the average night spent by visitors was around between 7 to 8. and most of the year people spend a similar amount of nights in the UK.
Overall we can say that in the year 2007 so many visitors went to the UK and also they spent so much money over there.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct possessive phrase Original: there are summarized spending Suggested revision: their spending Why it matters: Use the possessive determiner to show that the spending belongs to the visitors.
- 2. Correct period Original: between 2002 to 2008 Suggested revision: between 2003 and 2008 Why it matters: The table begins in 2003, and 'between' requires 'and'.
- 3. State spending units Original: the amount spent by them is in the billions Suggested revision: the amount spent is in billions of pounds Why it matters: The table reports total spending in billions of pounds.
- 4. Add article Original: also table illustrates Suggested revision: and the table also illustrates Why it matters: The singular countable noun 'table' needs an article and a conjunction here.
- 5. Correct nights measure Original: average Knights Suggested revision: average number of nights Why it matters: The table shows the average number of nights per visit, not 'Knights'.
- 6. Correct start year Original: 2002 Suggested revision: 2003 Why it matters: The first year shown in the table is 2003.
- 7. Use active verb Original: it was decreased in very low amount Suggested revision: it decreased slightly Why it matters: Use the intransitive active form and an adverb to describe the small fall.
- 8. Use data verb Original: stabled Suggested revision: stood Why it matters: 'Stood at' correctly introduces a value at a particular time.
- 9. Remove passive form Original: was fluctuated Suggested revision: fluctuated Why it matters: 'Fluctuate' is intransitive here and should not be passive.
- 10. Format range correctly Original: between 11.855 to 16.323 pound billions Suggested revision: between £11.855 billion and £16.323 billion Why it matters: Use 'between ... and' and the correct singular unit after each figure.
- 11. Correct spending unit Original: 466 to 511-pound billions Suggested revision: £466 to £511 per visitor Why it matters: These figures are pounds per visitor, not billions of pounds.
- 12. Correct noun phrase Original: And highest Spent per visit Suggested revision: The highest spend per visit Why it matters: The phrase needs an article and the noun 'spend' without internal capitalization.
Suggested Rewrites
- there are summarized spending their spending
- between 2002 to 2008 between 2003 and 2008
- the amount spent by them is in the billions the amount spent is in billions of pounds
- also table illustrates and the table also illustrates
- average Knights average number of nights
- 2002 2003
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the principal visitor trend and reports several relevant figures, giving it a recognizable account of the table. Its main weakness is precision: the period is misstated, spending per visitor is given in billions, and the overview does not clearly distinguish the peak years for visits and expenditure. Prioritize checking units, dates, and peak values against the table before writing a concise overview.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers all four measures and identifies the broad visitor trend, but its overview and several dates, units, and peak descriptions are inaccurate.
State that visits peaked in 2007 while total and per-visitor spending peaked in 2008, and report all units exactly as shown.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is grouped by measure and progresses logically, although run-on sentences, fragments, and poorly controlled linking weaken cohesion.
Use shorter complete sentences and connect comparisons only with linkers that express the intended relationship.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe trends and extremes, but frequent spelling and collocation errors such as “average Knights” and “pound billions” reduce precision.
Build a reliable set of table-reporting phrases and check the spelling, word form, and unit attached to every figure.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex structures, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries sometimes make meaning difficult to follow.
Prioritize accurate subject-verb structures and complete sentences before adding subordinate clauses or passive forms.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.
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