The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission in a university.
Sample Response
The column graph shows comparative dataa comparison data between the number of applicants and the number of students admitted to a universityaccepted students in a university over a decade, beginning in 1993commencing from 1993. Overall, the number of applicants to this university increased markedlyremarkably increased each year despite the relatively stable number of admissionsa stable acceptance rate by the university authority. According to the illustration, around 250 students applied for admission to that university and almost 200 of them were admittedgranted. Next year, applicants went up to approximately 800 but half of them were rejected. The number of applicantsadmission seekers to this institute rose steadilysteadily surged and in 2000 more than 3 thousand applicantspupils appliedattempted for admission. However, in that yearat this time only 600 of them were granted admission, meaning that about 80% of applicationsgranted admission which means 80% applications were rejected that yearin this year. This university accepted around 500 to 700 students each year from 1996 to 2003 despite the sharp risedespite a hike in the number of candidates. In 2002 and 2003 the university received around 4,000 to 4,500 applications4000 to 4500 application while they admitted around 650 to 700 studentsapproved around 650 students’ admission. To be admitted to this universityget admitted in this university a candidate had to compete with about five5-7 other applicants in 2003.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response selects the central rise in applications and supports it with several broadly accurate figures, while its sequencing remains easy to follow. However, the overview incorrectly describes the acceptance rate as stable when admissions remained fairly level and the proportion admitted fell sharply. The highest-priority improvement is to distinguish absolute admission numbers from the acceptance rate and present the key contrast accurately.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers the main rise in applications and several relevant figures, but its overview confuses stable admission numbers with a stable acceptance rate.
State that admissions levelled off at roughly 600-700 while applications continued rising, causing the proportion admitted to fall substantially.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the early years to the later period, although presenting the entire report as one paragraph weakens organisation.
Separate the overview from two grouped detail paragraphs so that the early growth and later divergence are easier to compare.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range for describing change and admission, but several collocations such as 'attempted for admission' are unnatural.
Use precise combinations such as 'applied for admission,' 'applications rose,' and 'the university admitted 650 students.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is generally controlled, despite recurring article, plural, and noun-form errors.
Check countable nouns and determiners carefully, especially forms such as 'applications,' 'the applications,' and 'students were admitted.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission in a university.
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