The graph below shows a 2008 report about the consumption of energy in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.
Sample Response
The line graph illustrates the USUSA energy consumption by fuel since 1980, with projections until 2030.
Overall, the consumption of almost all fuels is projected to increasealmost all of the energy consumption increased, except for that of hydropower, which remained relatively stableexcept hydropower remained stable. In addition,What's more, petrol and oil remained the most consumed fuelpetrol and oil were the highest during the period, whereas hydropower was the lowest.
The consumption of petrol and oil was nearly 36 quadrilion units in 1980, then it continued to rise during the period. It is predicted that it will increase to a peak of approximately 47 quadrilion units in 2030. Moreover, the consumptionconsumptions of coal and natural gas continued to rise from 1980 to 2014, reaching around 25 quadrillion unitsfrom 1908 to 2014, where they reached around 25 quadrilion units in 2014. Subsequently,And then, the consumption of natural gasconsumption of natural remained stable, while the consumption of coal continued to increase, with a projection that it will climb to a peak of approximately around 32 quadrillion units in 203030 in 2030.
However, the consumptions of the other three energy sourcesother three energy were much lower than those of coal, petrol and oil, and natural gasthan that of coal, petrol and oil and natural gas. The consumptions of nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower stood at approximately 3.5 quadrillion unitsheld about 3.5 quadrilion units in 1908, then the consumptions of nuclear and solar/wind began to rise slowly, while the consumption of hydropower showed a fluctuating trendhad a fulctuate trend from 1985 to 2010, then remainedreamined stable at the end of the period.
Why this response received Band 6.0
文章成功梳理了各能源消耗的主要趋势和高低对比,段落结构清晰明确。然而,文中出现了年代数据笔误(如误写为1908年)以及部分数值与图表略有出入的情况。建议加强图表数据的精读核对,并进一步提升复杂句式与语法细节的准确度。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务完成度
文章包含了清晰的总体趋势概述,并对主要能源类型进行了分类和对比,但存在年份笔误及个别数据描述不准确的问题。
仔细核对图表中的具体年份和数值,确保所有描述的数据与图表信息完全吻合。
连贯与衔接
文章采用了合理的逻辑顺序组织段落,但在衔接词的使用上稍显机械和重复。
多使用更自然、多样化的段落和句间连接词,避免频繁使用较为口语化的过渡词。
词汇资源
能够运用与趋势描述相关的词汇,但出现了个别拼写错误和词性搭配不当的情况。
注意专业词汇的准确拼写,并确保单位名称(如 quadrillion units)在数值后完整书写。
语法多样性与准确性
尝试使用了多种句型结构,但部分句子存在语法小错和名词单复数使用不当的问题。
加强对状语从句和介词短语结构的语法检查,确保主谓一致与名词修饰语的准确性。
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows a 2008 report about the consumption of energy in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.
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