The table below shows the number of tourists visiting the six World Heritage Sites in Australia between 1996 and 2000.
Sample Response
The table comparesbelow compare the number of tourists visiting the six World Heritage Sites in Australia during a period of 4 years. Overall, Great Barrier Reef is the most popular sitesit of these six sitesthese 6 sits, and the Macquarie IslandIsand attracted the fewest tourists. The number of tourists increased at most sitessits, with the Great Barrier Reef showing by far the largest increasement. In 1996, the Great Barrier Reef attracted 1670000 tourists, which was almost twice that of Central Eastern Rainforest Reserve. The Blue Mountains and the Tasmania WildernessBlue Mountains and Tasmania Wilderness received 526000 and 450000 tourists respectively, while Shark Bay was ranked fifth with 84000 visitors.Macquarie Island attracted just 350 tourists. The number of tourists visiting the Great Barrier Reefvisiting Great Barrier Reef kept rising from 1670000 to 3200000 over the four-year periodover the 4 years, which was the largest increaseis the largest increasement. The figure for the Central Eastern Rainforest ReserveThe figure of Central Eastern Rainforest Reserve fell from 810000 to 770000. The number of touristsThe numbere tourists visiting Blue Mountains and Shark Bay steadily increased by 55,000 and 5,000 respectivelyincreased by almost 6000. And it fell from 350 to 330 in Macquarie Island. Delete打分
Why this response received Band 6.0
文章包含清晰的概述并涵盖了图表的主要信息,整体逻辑结构分明。然而,部分数据归纳存在准确性偏差,且拼写与拼写衍生词错误较多。建议重点提高数据对比的准确度,并加强词汇拼写与语法一致性的检查。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务完成度
文章提供了明确的总体趋势概述,但在细节段落中对蓝山与鲨鱼湾的数据变化归纳不够准确,且遗漏了塔斯马尼亚荒野的变化趋势。
仔细核对图表数据,确保所有主要地点的变化趋势与数据对比完全准确无误。
连贯与衔接
文章采用了合理的段落划分,信息按照时间与具体特征展开,逻辑推进基本清晰。
增加更丰富的衔接词与对比连接句,使各段落和数据之间的过渡更加自然流畅。
词汇资源
拼写和构词错误出现频繁,如 sit、Isand、increasement 以及 numbere,对词汇质量造成了明显影响。
积累并熟记图表写作的高频词汇与名词形式,写完后仔细检查拼写正确性。
语法多样性与准确性
能够使用多种句型表达数据,但存在主谓一致错误以及介词或结构遗漏现象。
检查首句的主谓一致性,并确保在表达“……的数量”等句型时介词和名词结构完整。
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the number of tourists visiting the six World Heritage Sites in Australia between 1996 and 2000.
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