The bar chart shows different methods of waste disposal in four cities: Toronto, Madrid, Kuala Lumpur and Amman. Waste disposal in four cities.
Sample Response
The given bar graph shows data on the four different waste disposal methods used in Toronto, Madrid, Kuala Lumpur and Amman. As is presented in the data, Landfill and Incineration are two most common way of waste disposal in these four cities. According to the bar graph, Toronto disposes of more than 70% of its waste by Landfilling while Amman usages this method to dispose of almost half of its waste. In Madrid and Kuala Lumpur, this method is used to dispose consecutively of 29% and 18% of their wastages. Incineration is another popular method of waste disposal and Kuala Lumpur uses this method to dispose of more than half of its wastages. This method is used to dispose of 38% and 40% of waste respective in Amman and Madrid. Again, Recycling of wastages is used to dispose of about 23% garbage in Kuala Lumpur and Madrid. This method is used only to dispose of less than 10% of total wastages in Toronto and Amman. The least used method of waste disposal is Compositing and this method is used to dispose of about 2-8% of total wastages in these four cities.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Plural structure Original: Landfill and Incineration are two most common way Suggested revision: landfill and incineration are the two most common ways Why it matters: Use lowercase method names, 'the two', and plural 'ways'.
- 2. Use chart label Original: Landfilling Suggested revision: landfill Why it matters: The chart category is 'landfill'.
- 3. Wrong word form Original: Amman usages this method Suggested revision: Amman uses this method Why it matters: 'Usages' is a noun; the sentence needs the verb 'uses'.
- 4. Wrong adverb Original: consecutively of 29% and 18% Suggested revision: for 29% and 18%, respectively Why it matters: 'Respectively' is the correct word for matching two figures to two cities.
- 5. Uncountable noun Original: wastages Suggested revision: waste Why it matters: 'Waste' is normally uncountable in this context.
- 6. Exact method share Original: more than half of its wastages Suggested revision: about 55% of its waste Why it matters: The Kuala Lumpur incineration bar is about 55%.
- 7. Respectively form Original: waste respective in Amman and Madrid Suggested revision: waste in Amman and Madrid, respectively Why it matters: The adverb form should be 'respectively' and placed after both items.
- 8. Natural phrase Original: Recycling of wastages Suggested revision: Recycling waste Why it matters: This is the natural phrase; avoid 'wastages'.
- 9. Missing of Original: 23% garbage Suggested revision: 23% of garbage Why it matters: A percentage needs 'of' before the noun.
- 10. Spelling Original: Compositing Suggested revision: composting Why it matters: The correct method is 'composting'.
- 11. Sharper overview Original: As is presented in the data, Landfill and Incineration are two most common way of waste disposal in these four cities. Suggested revision: Overall, landfill and incineration are the dominant disposal methods, while composting is the least used method in all four cities. Why it matters: This overview captures the main pattern across the chart.
- 12. Rewrite landfill detail Original: According to the bar graph, Toronto disposes of more than 70% of its waste by Landfilling while Amman usages this method to dispose of almost half of its waste. Suggested revision: Toronto disposes of about 75% of its waste through landfill, while Amman uses this method for just under half of its waste. Why it matters: This fixes word form and gives a more accurate figure.
Suggested Rewrites
- Landfill and Incineration are two most common way landfill and incineration are the two most common ways
- Landfilling landfill
- Amman usages this method Amman uses this method
- consecutively of 29% and 18% for 29% and 18%, respectively
- wastages waste
- more than half of its wastages about 55% of its waste
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The response covers all four methods and cities, with several accurate figures and a clear sense that landfill and incineration dominate. However, the overview could be sharper and some values are imprecise or awkwardly compared.
State the main contrast clearly: Toronto relies heavily on landfill, Kuala Lumpur mostly uses incineration, while composting is the least used method everywhere.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows the chart categories in a logical order, but it is one long paragraph and linking words such as 'Again' are basic. Some comparisons would be easier to follow if grouped by city or method.
Use an introduction, overview, landfill/incineration paragraph, and recycling/composting paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is understandable but weakened by repeated 'dispose of', incorrect forms such as 'Landfilling', 'usages', 'wastages', and the misspelling 'Compositing'.
Use 'landfill', 'incineration', 'recycling', 'composting', 'accounts for', and 'is used for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent article, plural, and word-form errors occur, but the information is mostly understandable. Several percentage phrases need cleaner structure.
Proofread every noun after a percentage and avoid pluralizing uncountable 'waste'.