The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.
Sample Response
The process chart illustrates the operation of re-process the paper from the garbage.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that there are a total of five steps for restoring the paper from waste, beginning with the collection of waste material and culminating in a papermaking machine.
Begin with the waste paper collected from public paper banks and businesses, which are used by the department. this paper is then sorted by hand and graded, or unsuitable paper would be separated
During the process. Following this, then a group of sorted paper delivers to the Paper Mill by mode of transportation; the next process is cleaning, in which they deep clean the paper, including pulping and removing other material from the notepaper such as staples. In the subsequent stage, the wrapper goes through the process of de-inking so that extra glue or ink will be removed. Finally, the writing paper moves into the last stage for the papermaking machine, and it is interesting to note that paper will be manufactured according to the demand for usable wrappers.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use noun phrase Original: operation of re-process Suggested revision: process of recycling Why it matters: The preposition of must be followed by a noun or gerund form.
- 2. Name the material accurately Original: the paper from the garbage Suggested revision: waste paper Why it matters: Waste paper is the precise material shown in the diagram.
- 3. Use accurate process term Original: restoring the paper from waste Suggested revision: recycling waste paper Why it matters: Recycling accurately names the operation depicted rather than restoration.
- 4. State the final output Original: culminating in a papermaking machine Suggested revision: culminating in the production of usable paper Why it matters: The process ends with usable paper being manufactured by the machine.
- 5. Add sentence subject Original: Begin with Suggested revision: The process begins with Why it matters: A descriptive sentence needs a subject rather than an imperative verb.
- 6. Remove invented detail Original: , which are used by the department Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: The diagram does not mention a department using the banks or businesses.
- 7. Capitalise sentence opening Original: this Suggested revision: This Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence requires a capital letter.
- 8. Fix coordination and tense Original: or unsuitable paper would be separated Suggested revision: and unsuitable paper is removed. Why it matters: The second sorting action needs coordination and the present passive used for process descriptions.
- 9. Use formal passive voice Original: in which they deep clean the paper Suggested revision: during which the paper is thoroughly cleaned Why it matters: The passive construction avoids the unclear pronoun they and fits a process description.
- 10. Use parallel noun forms Original: including pulping and removing other material Suggested revision: including pulping and the removal of other materials Why it matters: Parallel noun structures and a plural count noun make the list grammatical.
- 11. Use consistent material term Original: notepaper Suggested revision: paper Why it matters: The diagram refers to waste paper generally, not specifically to notepaper.
- 12. Correct material name Original: wrapper Suggested revision: paper Why it matters: The material entering de-inking is paper, not a wrapper.
Suggested Rewrites
- operation of re-process process of recycling
- the paper from the garbage waste paper
- restoring the paper from waste recycling waste paper
- culminating in a papermaking machine culminating in the production of usable paper
- Begin with The process begins with
- , which are used by the department Delete
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response follows the process from collection to paper manufacture and mentions almost every essential operation in a recognisable sequence. Its effectiveness is reduced by the incorrect claim that there are five stages, several unsupported or imprecise details, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors that make some sentences difficult to follow. Prioritise an accurate six-stage overview, then describe each labelled step with simple passive structures and the diagram’s exact terminology.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most stages are described in the correct order, but the overview miscounts the six stages and some details are unsupported or imprecise.
State that the process has six stages and describe only the labelled actions, from collection through production of usable paper.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence is broadly logical and easy to identify, although awkward paragraphing and faulty linking interrupt the flow.
Use one paragraph for the early stages and one for the later stages, with a single clear transition between each step.
Lexical Resource
There is enough process vocabulary to convey the sequence, but frequent inaccurate choices such as wrapper, notepaper, and restoring reduce precision.
Reuse the diagram’s exact terms, including waste paper, paper mill, pulping, de-inking, and usable paper.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, agreement, and clause construction sometimes make the description difficult to follow.
Describe each stage with a short passive clause, such as the paper is sorted, transported, cleaned, and de-inked.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.
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