The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010.
Sample Response
The provided bar graph shows sales data of Woodward chocolate barsWoodland chocolate for the year 2010. As is observed from the given data, Wachi Bar was the best-selling chocolate bar in the first quartermost sold chocolate bar in the first quarter of the year while the popularity of Woody bar increased over timeover the time during the yearfor the given year. According to the given bar graph, from January to March, aroundfrom January to March around 19 million Wuzzle chocolate bars were soldsold in Woodland. During this period Wachi chocolate bar was the best-selling chocolate, with sales ofmost sold chocolate which was sold about 55 million barsmore than 55 million bars. The Wozic was the second most sold chocolate bar during this first quarter with more than 45 million sales volumes. The Woodywoody bar was the least sold item for this quarter with only 10 million sales. In the second quarter, the sales figures for all four chocolate bars weresales volume for all these four chocolate bars were around 20 million. Interestingly, inInterestingly in the third quarter, the sales figures for both Wachi and Wozic barsboth Wachi and Wozic chocolate sales volume decreased to 10 million while sales of the Wuzzle and Woody barsthe Wuzzle and Woody bars’ sales increased to 40 and 30 million respectively. In the final quarter, the sales volume for Wachi chocolate bar remained unchanged from the third quarterremained unchanged as it was in the third quarter while the Woody bars’ sales volume increased by 10 million compared to the previous quartermonth. In this final quarter, the Woody bar was the best-selling chocolate barhighest sold chocolate type and the sales volume of this bar increased throughout the year. The Wachi bar and the Wozic bar were sold around 20 and 35 million in the final quarter. In summary, there was a common pattern of the sales volumes of the four chocolate types for the year 2010 except that the sales volumeamount of Woody bar increased in each quarter while this volume decreased for the Wachi bar.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its orderly quarter-by-quarter coverage, including a useful recognition that Woody rose steadily while Wachi declined. Its main limitation is data and label accuracy, especially the incorrect first-quarter Wozic figure and the confused final-quarter series; the highest-priority improvement is to verify each colour and product name before writing comparisons, then summarise the four distinct patterns precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers every quarter and identifies two major trends, but it misnames Woodward, overstates Q1 Wozic sales, and confuses Wuzzle with Wachi in Q4.
Cross-check each series against the legend and report Q1 Wozic at about 35 million and Q4 Wuzzle at 20 million.
Coherence and Cohesion
Quarter-by-quarter sequencing creates clear overall progression, although the single long body paragraph and repetitive transitions make comparison less efficient.
Use an overview paragraph followed by two grouped detail paragraphs contrasting rising and falling products rather than narrating every quarter separately.
Lexical Resource
The report uses an adequate range of sales and trend vocabulary, but repetitive “most sold” phrasing and awkward forms such as “sales volumes” limit precision.
Vary accurate collocations with “recorded the highest sales,” “rose steadily,” “fell,” and “remained stable.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear despite recurring article, agreement, capitalization, and possessive-form errors across otherwise varied sentences.
Check plural agreement and product-name capitalization, especially in phrases such as “sales were” and “Woody Bar’s sales.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010.
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