The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050
Sample Response
The bar chart indicates the changesrise and fall in the share of the total world populationrate of total world population in four countries from 1950 to 2002 with projections fortowards 2050.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that China was the most populous country in the world but this first rank is anticipated to be taken by India in 2030. DeleteInterestingly, India was the only country thatnation which increasedhas enjoyed upswings in its share of the world's populationits share of total population.
In 1950, more than one-fifth of the total world population lived in Chinawas living in China, far exceeding the figures for India (15%), the USA (7%)USA (7%) and Japan (4%). In 2002, with the exception of India, these percentagesthese percentages thereafter experienced declinesprecipitous declines, standing atamounting to exactly 20% in China, 5% in the USA and approximately 3% in Japan. Meanwhile, in that yearat this point, India represented 17% of the world population after an increase of about 2 percentage pointsundergoing a 2% increase.
In 2050, it is estimated that India will be the country with the largest share among the four surveyed countriesmost populated area among four surveyed countries, accounting for almost one-fifth of the world's populationholding almost one-fifth of total population. Whilst the rate of the USA’s population is expected to remain relatively the same at 5% in 2030, there will be an expected downward trajectory in the figures for China and Japan, finishing at 15% and a negligible 1% in turn.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is well organised and gives a clear overview, with most major comparisons and figures selected accurately. Its main limitation is the repeated substitution of 2030 for the chart's projected year of 2050, alongside several awkward lexical choices. The highest-priority improvement is to verify every time reference against the visual and use more precise population language when describing rankings and proportions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and covers the main trends and comparisons, but it twice misidentifies the projected year as 2030.
Check every date and value directly against the chart before finalising the overview and detail paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into an overview and two chronological detail paragraphs, with clear progression throughout.
Use referencing and linking more economically so that transitions remain natural without phrases such as 'at this point' and 'in turn'.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and generally effective, although expressions such as 'first rank', 'populated area', and 'enjoyed upswings' are imprecise or unnatural.
Prefer precise collocations such as 'largest share', 'most populous country', and 'rose steadily'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is used with generally reliable control, despite a few awkward constructions and article or agreement lapses.
Refine noun phrases and relative clauses, especially in expressions comparing the four countries and their population shares.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050
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