The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Sample Response
The pie chart shows the different locations where young people in a town in Australia currently attend dance classes, while the bar chart illustrates the types of dance classes they take, with figures divided into two age groupscategorized by two age groups: under 11 and 11 to 16 years old.
Overall, private studios are the most popular location for dance classes. In terms of dance styles, younger students are more involved in ballet and tap, whereas older students are more numerous in modern dance classesmore likely to take modern dance classes.
According to the pie chart, nearly half (48%) of dance classes are held in private studios, making private studios the most common venuemaking them the most common venue. School halls used after school come second, accounting for 24%, which is exactly half the figure for private studios. Community halls and other locations represent 18%, while college-based studios make up the smallest proportion at just 10%.
The bar chart shows clear differences in dance class preferences by age. Ballet is the most popular among children under 11, with 600 participants—twice the figure for 11- to 16-year-oldsparticipants—double the number of those aged 11 to 16. Tap dancing is slightly more common in the younger group (450 students) than in the older groupthan the older one (420). In contrast, modern dance is most popular among 11- to 16-year-olds, with 520 students taking part, considerablysignificantly more than the 300 in the under-11 group.
Why this response received Band 9.0
This is a highly accurate, concise account that selects all major features, supports them with precise figures, and uses fluent, well-controlled language throughout. The overview identifies the dominant venue and the main age-based preferences, though it could be even more comprehensive by also highlighting the least-used location and the comparatively small difference in tap participation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fully covers both charts with an accurate overview, well-selected figures, and clear comparisons between locations and age groups.
Make the overview even more comprehensive by adding the least common venue and the relatively similar tap figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses naturally from the overview to separate, logically ordered detail paragraphs, with cohesive devices used unobtrusively.
Maintain this clear chart-by-chart structure while continuing to keep linking concise and purposeful.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied, precise, and consistently appropriate for describing proportions, rankings, and contrasts in visual data.
Refine occasional broad phrasing such as “more involved” by choosing the most exact comparison available from the figures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence structures is used accurately and flexibly, with punctuation and agreement consistently controlled.
Preserve this level of control while varying comparison structures only where they add precision or emphasis.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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