You recently found out about a part-time job. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter - state that you are applying for the part-time job - explain why you are applying - Give details about any relevant experience
Sample Response
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is John Smith. I am writing to apply for the advertised part-time jobwith regard to the part-time job that I am going to apply for.
I am currently a fourth-year university student, majoring in civil engineering. I have been given the top international student awardawarded for the top international student twice, which means that I excel academicallyexcel at my academics.
Alongside my studies,However, I would like to work part-timetake a part-time job outside my field of studyin other fields, to enrich both my professional and personal experienceboth of my work and life experience. It would be ideal if you could offerif you can provide me with opportunities to work as a sales assistant or waitersuch job opportunities as sales assistants or waiters. Not only can these jobs improve my communication skills, but they can also help me build a strong interpersonal networkthey are also able to offer me great interpersonal networks.
I have experience working as a tutorexperience of working as a tutor, helping students who have trouble withhave troubles dealing with math assignments and engineering analysis. I know that this kind of work experience is not very relevant to the part-time job that I would like to take, but I believe my hard-working attitude and willingness to learn will meet your requirementsmeet the needs of most employers.
I hope you can give this application serious considerationtake this application into serious consideration, and I look forward to hearing from youreceiving your response.
Yours faithfully,
John Smith
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter is clearly organised and maintains an appropriately formal tone, with useful personal details supporting the writer's motivation and experience. Its main limitation is that the application remains insufficiently targeted: it does not identify the advertised role and instead asks the manager to provide several possible jobs. The priority is to name the position precisely and use more natural employment-related collocations throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is generally clear and all three bullet points are addressed, but the application is vague about the actual advertised position.
Identify the specific role at the outset and connect the stated experience directly to its duties and requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter progresses logically through the application, motivation, experience, and closing, with clear paragraphing.
Make the links between the desired role, its benefits, and the relevant experience more direct and less dependent on stock connectors.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary shows some range, but recurring awkward collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace phrases such as taking a job and offering interpersonal networks with natural employment and professional-development expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful variety of complex structures is mostly controlled, and the few errors do not impede meaning.
Improve accuracy with conditional forms, countable nouns, and relative clauses in phrases such as students having trouble.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You recently found out about a part-time job. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter
- state that you are applying for the part-time job
- explain why you are applying
- Give details about any relevant experience
Your response
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