You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter: - tell your friend about the party - ask for the recipe - explain why you need the recipe from his/her country

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Sample Response

1

Dear Neha, Hope you're doing great. I still miss spendingmy time with your children who are so adorable and friendlyamiable. I must say I had a great time with you last summer. Today I'm writing to ask you for a recipe that I'm planning to include on the party menuin a party menu. Last month I moved to a new apartment in Utica, a city in the Mohawk Valley, New York, and I plan to inviteI have plans to invite some friends and neighbours to a party I'm thinking of holdingparty I'm thinking to hold in September. It will beIt'd be a dinner party and I'll invite around 25 guests. Many of my friends are from India and I'm planning to add a special Indian dishspecial Indian food item.

2

I'm so fond of your Hyderabadi Biryani, you make it really special, and would like you to provide me with the recipe. I've tried it several times but never had a glimpse of the magnificent aroma and taste that you can bring to it. Would you please send me detailed instructions, an ingredient listingredient list and the cooking method you usecooking method you employ for the deliciouscelestial Hyderabadi Biryani you make? I want to give the Indian guests a fabulous dining experienceexperience of the dinner and invite some neighbours to taste it and see howtaste it to give an impression of how Indian cuisinecuisines can win their stomachs and heartsstomach and heart! Warm wishes, Raima

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The letter achieves its friendly purpose particularly well, covering the party, the requested recipe, and the reason for choosing Indian food with engaging, specific detail. Its main limitation is that some ambitious wording and long sentence structures sound unnatural or become loosely controlled. The highest-priority improvement is to express the request and its motivation in more idiomatic, concise language while retaining the warm personal tone.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are fully developed, and the warm informal tone suits a letter to a friend.

Next step

Make the reason for serving this particular national dish slightly more direct and concise to sharpen the communicative focus.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Information progresses logically from the party arrangements to the recipe request, although the two dense body paragraphs contain some overlong sentences.

Next step

Separate the party details, recipe request, and explanation into clearer paragraph units and shorten the final sentence.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A wide and engaging vocabulary is used, but several ambitious combinations such as "glimpse of the magnificent aroma" and "Indian cuisines" are not fully natural.

Next step

Prioritise precise, idiomatic collocations over ornate expressions, for example describing recreating the dish's aroma and flavour.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

The letter shows a good range of complex structures, with occasional punctuation, article, and sentence-control lapses that do not impede meaning.

Next step

Check long coordinated sentences for comma splices and add missing determiners in phrases such as "an ingredient list".

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter:

- tell your friend about the party

- ask for the recipe

- explain why you need the recipe from his/her country

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