Every year, someone in the company where you work is chosen as the best employee. Your manager has asked staff members to make suggestions about who should be chosen this year. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - identify a colleague who you think should be the best employee - explain what the job of this colleague involves - give reasons why the colleague should be chosen as the best employee

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Sample Response

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Dear Mr George, I hope you are doing wellHope you are doing well. I am also feeling great since the time of the year is approaching for us again when we get to decide on the best employee of our company. I believe thatAnd I think that Rebecca Graham, our senior marketing managerSenior Marketing Manager, should be selected aspicked up as the best employee this year, simply because of the value and experience she brings to our company. Of course, we all know how Rebecca Graham works tirelessly to motivate her entire sales teamcrew of salespeople to increase company salesincrease the sales of our company, but what most of us do not know is that she always likes to visit the clients and dealers of our company by herself in order to get feedbackthe feedbacks of our customers in real timein real-time. Besides, she also works extra hours to train and teach her subordinates who fail to achieve their monthly sales targets in this very competitive market. So, once again, considering the contribution of Rebecca Graham, I believe she deserves to be the best employee in our company. Yours sincerely, Jonathon Louis

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter makes an unambiguous nomination, explains Rebecca's management role, and supports the choice with concrete examples of client contact, staff motivation, training, and extra hours. Its main limitation is professional polish: the response is one paragraph and includes informal or inaccurate phrases such as "picked up," "crew," and "feedbacks"; prioritise clear bullet-aligned paragraphing and concise workplace vocabulary.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The nominee is clearly identified, her responsibilities are explained, and several relevant reasons convincingly support her selection.

Next step

Strengthen the recommendation by explicitly linking one achievement, such as improved sales or staff performance, to the company's best-employee criteria.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The letter progresses logically from nomination to duties and reasons, but the single-block format and one very long sentence reduce readability.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for the nomination, job responsibilities, and supporting reasons, and divide the long client-and-staff sentence.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

There is adequate workplace vocabulary, but recurring imprecise choices weaken the otherwise clear professional message.

Next step

Replace "picked up," "crew," "feedbacks," and "sales of our company" with "selected," "team," "feedback," and "company sales."

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

Complex structures are used with generally clear meaning, although fragments, conjunction openings, noun forms, and clause length need firmer control.

Next step

Turn the opening fragment into a complete sentence and separate the extended sentence beginning "Of course" into controlled clauses.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

Every year, someone in the company where you work is chosen as the best employee. Your manager has asked staff members to make suggestions about who should be chosen this year. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

- identify a colleague who you think should be the best employee

- explain what the job of this colleague involves

- give reasons why the colleague should be chosen as the best employee

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