Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: - suggest someone - who deserves the reward - mention what they have done to help the community - say what reward you would like to give this person
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of Kensington, Melbourne, writing to express my appreciation for your decision to reward people who have selflessly helped others and brought about positive changesbrought positive changes to the community. I would like to recommend someone for the award who has contributed immensely to make our community a better place. Mr Albenny, a retired government officer, also knownknows as the pioneer of the green movement in our community, is an excellent candidate for the awarddeserves the award more than anyone else. He has been working on the Green Movement project for more than 20 years and has since inspired a thousand others to plant trees and protectsave the environment. His dedication is inspiring, andHis dedication is inspiring and three years ago, our communitythree years ago our community received national recognition forreceived national recognition due to the green movement pioneered by Mr Albenny. He is a highly respectedrevered person who is equally loved by his people across the communityfriends and foes. I personally believe that you should consider him for the award you are intending to present to people with their great contributions to the community. What can be more inspiring when someone's actions motivate hundreds of others to make the world a better place to live in? A simple crest or trophyA simple crest or a trophy as the award would suffice, but you should make the award ceremonyaward-giving ceremony open to everyoneopen for all. Once again, thank youOnce again thank you for your time and initiative. Yours faithfully, Helena Gomez
Why this response received Band 7.5
The recommendation is persuasive and well supported, with specific evidence of Mr Albenny's long-term environmental work and a clearly proposed reward. The main limitation is that several ambitious phrases and grammatical constructions are awkward, which occasionally weakens precision despite the strong vocabulary. The highest-priority improvement is to edit complex sentences for accurate forms and more natural collocations while keeping the confident formal tone.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter clearly nominates a suitable person, explains his contribution with convincing detail, and proposes an appropriate reward in a formal register.
Keep the recommendation concise by replacing the rhetorical question with a direct statement reinforcing why he deserves the award.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas move logically from the nomination to supporting achievements and the suggested reward, although repetition and the single-block presentation slightly weaken cohesion.
Use distinct paragraphs for the nomination, evidence, and reward proposal, and avoid repeating the award and community unnecessarily.
Lexical Resource
The response demonstrates flexible, topic-specific vocabulary such as selflessly, pioneered, revered, and suffice, with a few awkward combinations.
Refine collocations such as contributed immensely to making and an award recognising their great contributions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence forms is used with generally good control, but errors such as also knows as and some awkward relative clauses are noticeable.
Check participle forms, relative clauses, and agreement carefully, especially in longer sentences carrying several ideas.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter:
- suggest someone
- who deserves the reward
- mention what they have done to help the community
- say what reward you would like to give this person
Your response
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