You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - say about the concert - say why you are unable to go - inform how your friend can receive the ticket

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Sample Response

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Dear Paul, I hope you are doing wellHope you are doing fine and things are going well with youthings are good at your side. You may remember thatAnyway, if I remember correctly when we spoke a few weeks agowhen we were talking a few weeks ago, you expressed your interest in goingexpressed your interest to go to a concert by the "Living Loud" music band, if time permits. I think thishere is your chance to see them in concertto go to a concert by this music band and they will performrock the fans at Trivision Stadium on the evening of 2727th July. You would be glad to know that I am offering yougoing to offer you the ticket for this concertfor this music concert. Actually, I bought this ticket for myself, but, unfortunately, a few days after purchasing itafter a few days of purchasing that ticket, one of my cousins invitedrequested me to visit his hometown and I decidedand not to mention, of course, I decided to accompany him and stay in his hometownaccompany him to stay at his hometown for a couple of days. But that would also mean that my concert ticket would go to wastewould go wasted as our travel dates overlap with the concertour timing to travel intersects the concert schedule. So, I am offering this ticket to you and I hope you will enjoy the concert. Please come to my home at any timePlease visit anytime at my home or meet me at the college library so that I can hand over the ticket to you. Warm wishes, Lucas

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter fully explains the concert, the conflicting trip with a cousin, and two convenient ways to collect the ticket, while maintaining a warm and appropriately informal tone. Its strongest feature is the clear, generous purpose supported by specific venue and date details. The main limitation is wordiness and awkward phrasing in the explanation of the travel conflict; prioritise shorter sentences and natural conversational expressions.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

All required information is clearly provided, and the friendly tone and closing are well suited to writing to a friend.

Next step

Add a simple collection deadline or suggested meeting time so the practical handover arrangement is completely settled.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The letter follows a logical path from recalling the friend's interest to offering the ticket, explaining the conflict, and arranging collection.

Next step

Break the long explanation about the cousin into shorter sentences and reduce repetition of 'ticket' and 'concert'.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is sufficiently varied and appropriately informal, but several expressions about interest, travel, and availability sound unnatural.

Next step

Use 'interested in going', 'the ticket would go to waste', 'our trip clashes with the concert', and 'drop by my house'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

A range of complex sentences is attempted, but punctuation, clause control, prepositions, and some verb patterns are inconsistently accurate.

Next step

Separate the longest sentence after 'for myself' and use clear structures such as 'My cousin invited me to visit his hometown that weekend'.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:

- say about the concert

- say why you are unable to go

- inform how your friend can receive the ticket

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