You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter: - describe the event - mention what arrangements have already been made - say how your friend can help
Sample Response
Dear Andrew,
Hope you're doing well. I'm writing this letter to you because I need your help in arranging an event in the countryside next week.
This particular event is going to be about raising awareness of childhood obesityraising awareness against the obesity problem among young children. Since obesity among children is higher than ever before, I, as a youth sports coordinator in my district, want to do something to change it.
As for making this event successful, I've already put together a programme of sports and outdoor activitiesplan for the sports and outdoor activities, in which young children can take part. In additionBesides, I've also arranged for a mini-concert where young artists will perform to entertain the children. By the way, I have also invitedI also have invited some distinguished guests and health specialists, whose inputinputs on this particular issue would certainly go a long way towards changinggo a long way to change the eating habits of the children in favour of a more balanced and healthy diet.
So, you can say that I've completed most of the arrangementscovered a large portion of it to make this event successful, but I could certainly use help from you in arranging some healthy, fresh foodhealthy and fresh foods for our guests. After all, you are a nutritionist, and a very good one.
Warm wishes,
Abbey
Why this response received Band 8.0
The letter communicates its purpose immediately, covers every requested point with well-chosen detail, and maintains a warm, appropriate tone throughout. Its main limitation is occasional awkward phrasing and collocation, particularly when describing obesity awareness and expert contributions. The highest-priority improvement is to refine these expressions so that the otherwise fluent and persuasive request sounds consistently natural and precise.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are fully addressed, and the friendly register is consistently appropriate.
Make the requested help even more actionable by briefly specifying the quantity, timing, or delivery arrangements for the food.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically through the event, completed arrangements, and requested help, with clear paragraphing and cohesive links.
Replace a few conspicuous linking phrases such as 'By the way' with smoother transitions that reflect the close relationship between the ideas.
Lexical Resource
A broad and generally precise vocabulary supports detailed communication, though a few collocations such as 'awareness against' and 'whose inputs' sound unnatural.
Use more idiomatic combinations such as 'raise awareness of childhood obesity' and 'whose advice could help change children's eating habits.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, with only occasional non-impeding slips in word order and phrasing.
Polish auxiliary placement and sentence phrasing, for example changing 'I also have invited' to 'I have also invited.'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter:
- describe the event
- mention what arrangements have already been made
- say how your friend can help
Your response
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