You want to apply for a job advertised by a restaurant. The restaurant requires a waiter or waitress for evening work and says that the candidate should have some experience. Write a letter to Mr Moore. In your letter: - describe your previous experience - explain why you would be suitable for the job
Sample Response
Dear Mr Moore, I am writing regardingin regards to the job opening that you have recently advertisedadvertised recently for the waiter position at your restaurantfor the post of a waiter in your restaurant. I would like to apply for the position as my experience and personal qualities would make me a suitabledeserving candidate for the job. Currently, I am studying a hotel management coursethe Hotel Management course at Hilson University. I want to use my summer holidayutilise my summer holidays by working in a field related to my studiesan industry related to my studies. I have experience as a waiter at a local restaurant and I worked there for more than six months. My responsibilities involved taking orders and making sure that customers at my tables receivedget their orders on time. I alsoBesides, I handled customer complaints. In addition, IIn addition, I also worked as a bartender at a bar for three months. I am hard-working and punctual. All of my previous employers would be willing to give me a good reference if needed. I am alsoAlso, I am quite flexible and able to do all sorts of tasks. My previous experience as a waiterAnd my previous waiter experience would allow me to easily settle into the roleset in the vacancy at your restaurant. Please spare some of your precious time to look at my attached résumémy resume which I am attaching with this letter. I can attend a formal interviewmeet you in a formal interview to further discuss my candidacy. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours sincerelyfaithfully, Sandeep Parekh
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter clearly establishes the application purpose and supports suitability with specific restaurant, bartending, and customer-service experience. Its main limitation is that several transitions and collocations sound mechanical or unnatural, despite generally accurate and varied sentences; the highest-priority improvement is to organise the experience and suitability points into distinct paragraphs while replacing phrases such as ‘set in the vacancy’ with precise professional wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The application fully covers the requested experience and suitability points with relevant supporting detail and an appropriately formal purpose.
Strengthen the close by stating availability for evening work explicitly, as this is central to the advertised position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress logically from the application purpose through experience and personal qualities, but the single-block presentation and connector use are somewhat mechanical.
Separate the letter into clear purpose, experience, suitability, and closing paragraphs, using fewer additive linkers.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows a sufficient range of job-related vocabulary, though several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including ‘deserving candidate’ and ‘set in the vacancy’.
Use more natural professional collocations such as ‘strong candidate’, ‘fit the role’, and ‘available for an interview’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex sentence forms is used with generally good control, and the few errors do not impede meaning.
Refine article, preposition, and tense choices, particularly in phrases such as ‘in regards to’ and ‘customers at my tables get’.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You want to apply for a job advertised by a restaurant. The restaurant requires a waiter or waitress for evening work and says that the candidate should have some experience. Write a letter to Mr Moore. In your letter:
- describe your previous experience
- explain why you would be suitable for the job
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