You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter: - Explain why you do not like the current programs? - Describe what kind of programs you would like to see instead? - Explain why these programs would be better?
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to express my dissatisfaction regarding TV programmes that telecast in the evening. They are more a bit boring to watch.
Let me inform you the reason being discontented about current programmes is repeated sequence of melodramas that really do not entertain me instead these have an adverse effect on the psyche of my daughter, who is too small to understand the synopsis of these and find the heart to make her cheerful.
I would like to watch comedy programmes, cartoons and moreover jungle book series, which have always fascinated me. What’s more, the treasure hunt which had not been telecast for a couple of weeks is demanded more at that time.
Suffice to say that these TV programmes not only rejuvenate both of us but also help us in removing our monotony. I have been working round the clock, so it is the evening time that I can enjoy with my daughter. So, I suppose to lead a cheerful life and develop positivity, the need to telecast such programmes is felt.
I hope you would ponder over my request and help me in reviving the above-mentioned programmes to enjoy evening time. If it is not possible then rescheduling the time after 6 in the evening, would be an ideal option.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours Faithfully,
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use correct preposition Original: regarding TV programmes Suggested revision: with the TV programmes Why it matters: The noun phrase 'dissatisfaction with' takes the preposition 'with'.
- 2. Add passive verb Original: that telecast in the evening Suggested revision: that are broadcast in the evening Why it matters: Programmes receive the action, so this clause needs a passive verb form.
- 3. Remove double modifier Original: more a bit boring Suggested revision: a bit boring Why it matters: 'More' and 'a bit' cannot modify 'boring' together in this structure.
- 4. Coordinate the list Original: cartoons and moreover jungle book series Suggested revision: cartoons and The Jungle Book series Why it matters: 'Moreover' does not work inside this list, and the programme title needs capitals.
- 5. Use present perfect Original: had not been telecast Suggested revision: has not been broadcast Why it matters: The absence began a few weeks ago and continues now, so the present perfect is needed.
- 6. Clarify the request Original: is demanded more at that time Suggested revision: should also be broadcast at that time Why it matters: The original wording does not clearly state the requested scheduling action.
- 7. Complete the expression Original: Suffice to say Suggested revision: Suffice it to say Why it matters: The fixed expression requires the pronoun 'it'.
- 8. Use natural wording Original: rejuvenate both of us Suggested revision: help both of us relax Why it matters: 'Help both of us relax' is more natural for describing evening entertainment.
- 9. Improve collocation Original: help us in removing our monotony Suggested revision: relieve our boredom Why it matters: 'Relieve our boredom' is the natural collocation for this intended meaning.
- 10. Clarify the time phrase Original: it is the evening time Suggested revision: the evening is the only time Why it matters: This form correctly identifies the evening as the available time.
- 11. Use direct wording Original: ponder over my request Suggested revision: consider my request Why it matters: 'Consider my request' is more natural and appropriately formal in this letter.
- 12. Choose precise verb Original: help me in reviving Suggested revision: help me restore Why it matters: A station can restore programmes to its schedule, whereas 'reviving' is imprecise here.
Suggested Rewrites
- regarding TV programmes with the TV programmes
- that telecast in the evening that are broadcast in the evening
- more a bit boring a bit boring
- cartoons and moreover jungle book series cartoons and The Jungle Book series
- had not been telecast has not been broadcast
- is demanded more at that time should also be broadcast at that time
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter addresses all three requested points with a clear purpose, suitable formal tone, and relevant suggestions for more enjoyable evening viewing. Its main limitation is that frequent awkward phrasing and several overlong or loosely connected sentences make parts of the message sound unnatural and occasionally obscure. Prioritise simpler sentence structures and precise collocations so the reasons and requests are consistently easy to follow.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all bullet points are covered, and the formal register is generally suitable, although the final scheduling alternative is somewhat unclear.
Clarify exactly which programmes should be revived or rescheduled and present the final request without ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical paragraph structure, but some long sentences and mechanical linking weaken the flow within ideas.
Divide the longest sentences into shorter units and use linking words only where the relationship between ideas is explicit.
Lexical Resource
A reasonably wide vocabulary communicates the message, though several collocations and word choices are unnatural or imprecise.
Replace strained expressions with natural phrases such as repeated melodramas, cheer her up, and relieve our boredom.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter uses both simple and complex forms, but recurring errors in clauses, agreement, and sentence construction reduce accuracy.
Focus on controlling relative clauses and subject-verb agreement, especially when writing longer explanatory sentences.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter:
- Explain why you do not like the current programs?
- Describe what kind of programs you would like to see instead?
- Explain why these programs would be better?
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