You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: - Explain why you want to leave your current job - Describe what kind of job you are looking for - Ask for some help or advice
Sample Response
Dear Suhel,
I hope you are in the best of your health. As I have planned to quit my ongoing job and endeavour for a new role, I need your help to make my quest a little easier.
I have been working in this organization for more than 5 years. Initially, the work was quite challenging, which I liked as it included many of the latest tools and technologies to work on. But for the last 2 years, it has become monotonous work with most of the tasks performed manually.
Due to this kind of work environment, I have decided to resign and look for something new and exciting. I am searching for a job that includes working on different state-of-the-art technologies with a mostly automated approach. Moreover, if the job profile combines software development and testing, it would be best.
As I have already started giving interviews in my location, it would be conducive to looking for the companies in your city, as I am comfortable relocating, which have the exact requirements that I have listed above.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Warmest regards,
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural greeting Original: in the best of your health Suggested revision: in good health Why it matters: 'In good health' is the standard expression in this greeting.
- 2. Use natural phrase Original: ongoing Suggested revision: current Why it matters: 'Current job' is the usual expression for the position someone now holds.
- 3. Correct verb pattern Original: endeavour Suggested revision: search Why it matters: 'Endeavour for' is not a natural verb pattern for seeking a new role.
- 4. Use everyday wording Original: quest Suggested revision: search Why it matters: 'Search' is clearer and more natural in a personal letter about job hunting.
- 5. Remove redundant phrase Original: to work on Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: The phrase is unnecessary because the sentence already says the work included those tools and technologies.
- 6. Correct complement form Original: monotonous work Suggested revision: monotonous Why it matters: After 'has become,' the adjective alone correctly describes the work.
- 7. Use concise term Original: job profile Suggested revision: role Why it matters: 'Role' is the natural term for a job combining development and testing.
- 8. Correct interview collocation Original: giving Suggested revision: attending Why it matters: Job applicants attend interviews rather than give them.
- 9. Sentence rewrite Original: As I have already started giving interviews in my location, it would be conducive to looking for the companies in your city, as I am comfortable relocating, which have the exact requirements that I have listed above. Suggested revision: I have already started attending interviews in my area, but could you also look for companies in your city that need the skills I listed above? I am comfortable relocating. Why it matters: The rewrite removes the tangled clause structure and makes the request for help explicit.
Suggested Rewrites
- in the best of your health in good health
- ongoing current
- endeavour search
- quest search
- to work on Delete
- monotonous work monotonous
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter gives a well-developed explanation for leaving, defines the desired role clearly, and makes a relevant request for help, with logical paragraphing throughout. The main limitation is that several expressions sound overly formal or unnatural for a friend, and the final request becomes cumbersome; the highest priority is to use more conversational, precise wording and state the requested help in a direct, concise sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are developed clearly, and the purpose is maintained, though parts of the register are more formal than a letter to a friend requires.
Ask directly whether the friend knows suitable employers or vacancies and adopt a consistently warm, personal tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced into reasons, job preferences, and a request for assistance, with effective paragraphing.
Shorten the final body sentence and separate the relocation detail from the request so the key action is easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
A broad work-related vocabulary is used, but phrases such as 'ongoing job,' 'endeavour for a new role,' and 'giving interviews' are unnatural.
Choose idiomatic alternatives such as 'current job,' 'look for a new role,' and 'attending interviews.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is handled with generally good control, and most errors do not impede communication.
Simplify the heavily embedded final sentence and ensure relative clauses attach clearly to the noun they describe.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter:
- Explain why you want to leave your current job
- Describe what kind of job you are looking for
- Ask for some help or advice
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