You had a good meal at a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: - tell the newspaper about the restaurant - describe the meal you had - explain why you think the restaurant is worth visiting
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of Panadura city in Kaluthara district and writing to express my enthusiasm regarding a restaurant that I visited with my family last week. I believe this is a magnificent place for diners and would like you to publish a review on it so that others in our community can learn about it I have visited the establishment - The River View, with my family to enjoy dinner last Sunday. The surrounding view is wonderful and it was decorated gorgeously. The decoration and ambience of the place were mesmerising, not to mention the well-behaved staff. We ordered fried rice, chicken curry, Parata and Lunumiris and I personally felt that they had a wide range of dishes we could choose from. We were served very quickly and the food tasted celestial. Normally, I don't each much at night, but on that day I had a heavy meal! They offered us a 15% discount and a complimentary dessert. All of my family members appreciated the dining experience and mentioned the scrumptious menu they enjoyed. They thanked me for taking them to a great eatery. This letter is to inform about this restaurant to the mass people because it is a worth visiting place. Yours faithfully, Ashesha Weerasinghe
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add auxiliary verb Original: and writing to express Suggested revision: and am writing to express Why it matters: The coordinated predicate requires "am" after "I."
- 2. Use appreciation for Original: enthusiasm regarding Suggested revision: appreciation for Why it matters: This is a more natural formal expression for praising the restaurant.
- 3. Fix review preposition Original: on Suggested revision: of Why it matters: A review is written "of" a place or experience.
- 4. Separate sentences Original: about it I have visited Suggested revision: about it. I visited Why it matters: A full stop is required, and the simple past matches the specified time.
- 5. Punctuate restaurant name Original: establishment - The River View, Suggested revision: restaurant, The River View, Why it matters: Commas correctly set off the restaurant name as an appositive.
- 6. Clarify the view Original: surrounding view Suggested revision: view from the restaurant Why it matters: The replacement states clearly where the view is seen from.
- 7. Clarify pronoun Original: it was decorated gorgeously Suggested revision: the restaurant was beautifully decorated Why it matters: The explicit noun removes the unclear reference and uses a natural adverb.
- 8. Use courteous staff Original: well-behaved staff Suggested revision: courteous staff Why it matters: "Courteous" appropriately describes professional restaurant service.
- 9. Correct dish spelling Original: Parata Suggested revision: paratha Why it matters: This is the standard English spelling and does not require a capital letter in the list.
- 10. Use direct observation Original: I personally felt Suggested revision: I noticed Why it matters: This is more concise and avoids unnecessary personal emphasis.
- 11. Clarify subject Original: they had a wide range Suggested revision: the restaurant offered a wide range Why it matters: The restaurant, rather than an unclear "they," offers the dishes.
- 12. Use delicious Original: celestial Suggested revision: delicious Why it matters: "Celestial" is unnatural for describing the taste of a meal.
Suggested Rewrites
- and writing to express and am writing to express
- enthusiasm regarding appreciation for
- on of
- about it I have visited about it. I visited
- establishment - The River View, restaurant, The River View,
- surrounding view view from the restaurant
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter gives the restaurant a clear identity, vividly describes the meal and service, and supplies several convincing reasons for publication and a visit. Its main weakness is recurrent language imprecision and sentence control, including a missing stop after the opening request and unnatural phrases such as mass people and a worth visiting place; prioritise proofreading sentence boundaries and using concise, formal expressions for a newspaper audience.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The restaurant, meal, service, and reasons for visiting are all developed clearly, and the request for newspaper coverage is explicit.
Conclude with a direct, professionally worded recommendation that links the food, service, ambience, and value without repeating the purpose.
Coherence and Cohesion
The content moves logically from introduction to meal and recommendation, but the single paragraph and one run-on transition weaken organisation.
Separate the opening request, dining experience, and recommendation into distinct paragraphs and add a full stop before introducing the visit.
Lexical Resource
The response uses varied descriptive vocabulary for food and ambience, but several choices are unnatural and one spelling error changes meaning.
Replace tasted celestial, mass people, and a worth visiting place with tasted excellent, the wider public, and well worth visiting, and correct each to eat.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures is attempted, but tense, sentence-boundary, article, and clause-control errors recur while meaning remains clear.
Proofread past-time references and sentence boundaries, using I visited last Sunday and ending the publication request before the next sentence.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You had a good meal at a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter:
- tell the newspaper about the restaurant
- describe the meal you had
- explain why you think the restaurant is worth visiting
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.