You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: - explain why you have moved - describe the new house - invite your friend to come and visit

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Sample Response

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Dear [friend's name]Dear Friend,

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I hope this letter finds you in good health. I am delighted to share that I have recently movedrelocated to Sydney. It has been a week since I arrived in the citylanded in the new city. I had been hoping to move here for a long timewas anticipating moving here for a really long time, and finally, I received a job offer with excellent termsthe employment offer with a great appraisal. I had to go through numerous interviewsattend numerous interviews before I secured this positiongot this opportunity, and my relocation expenses are fully coveredthe expenses are entirely sponsored by the organization.

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Furthermore, the company has provided an apartment for me to live inan apartment to stay in for as long as I need itas long as required. It is a gated community with nearly 200 houses. The community offers various amenitiesIt consists of various amenities such as a gym, park, pool, and yoga centre. I prefer to unwindrejuvenate myself after a busy day at the office by utilizing these facilities.

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Moreover, it has been a long time since we met at graduationsince we met after our graduation. So,Hence I would like to invite you to my apartment on Sunday and have a small get-togetherget together if possible. Eagerly waiting to meet you soon.

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Best regardsRegards,

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter covers all three required points in a clear progression and supports the move and invitation with relevant details. Its main weakness is an overly formal, impersonal tone for a close friend, accompanied by several strained expressions about the job and accommodation. The best next step is to adopt warmer, more natural phrasing while describing the apartment itself more specifically.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

6.5
Scoring rule

All bullet points are addressed with relevant detail, but the formal tone and generic salutation are not fully appropriate for a friend.

Next step

Use the friend's name, a warmer conversational style, and a little more detail about the apartment's rooms or location.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The ideas are logically grouped into the reason for moving, the new home, and the invitation, with clear overall progression.

Next step

Replace some formal linking words with more natural connections so the friendly letter reads less like a report.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The response demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, although phrases such as 'employment offer with a great appraisal' are imprecise or unnatural.

Next step

Prioritize accurate everyday collocations, such as 'a well-paid job offer', 'moving costs', and 'company-provided apartment'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

Complex and simple structures are used with generally good control, while a few awkward constructions and the final sentence fragment remain.

Next step

Revise incomplete or compressed structures into full natural sentences, for example 'I am really looking forward to seeing you soon'.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter:

- explain why you have moved

- describe the new house

- invite your friend to come and visit

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