You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking friend to tell them about it. In your letter: - Explain why you have moved - Describe the new apartment - Invite him to pay a visit
Sample Response
Dear Ewatomi, HowDear Ewatomi How are you, and how is work going? I hope you’re gettinghaving enough rest. I am writing to inform you that I have movedthat i moved to a different house. I have told you before, as i have been telling you about the poor security at my old house: thieves were always breaking inat my old house, thieves are always intruding, making off with our belongingscarting away with our belongings, because the house was neither fenced nor guardedas the house was not fenced and neither has a security guard. My new apartment is located just a few milesjust few miles away from the main road, it is fencedits fenced with electric wires around the entire perimeterelectrical wires round the whole fence. It is also very spacious, also its very spacious, freshly painted, and it haswell painted, there is also a pool and a flower garden; above all,a flower garden and above all it’s very close to my place of work. I really can'tcant wait to have you overaround, and I hope you can comeas I hope you’d come to visit when you are off workwhenever you’re off duty. Lots of love, KDJLots of Love KDJ
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter’s strongest feature is its clear, relevant explanation of the move and its concrete description of the new apartment in an appropriately warm voice. Its main limitation is that it is under length and compresses nearly all content into long, comma-linked sentences, leaving the invitation thinly developed. The highest-priority improvement is to add a specific visiting plan and organise the three purposes into separate paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are addressed, but the short response develops the invitation only briefly and offers limited detail beyond the main facts.
Expand the invitation with a suggested date, practical directions, or an activity to do together while keeping the friendly tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
The content follows the task’s order, but the single-paragraph format and long chains of clauses weaken cohesion and readability.
Give the reason, apartment description, and invitation their own paragraphs and use shorter sentences within each section.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient and sometimes specific, especially for security and apartment features, although several word combinations are inaccurate.
Use natural combinations such as “a few miles,” “surrounded by an electric fence,” and “stealing our belongings.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The intended meaning remains clear, but frequent comma splices, missing apostrophes, capitalization errors, and faulty clause structures reduce accuracy.
Rewrite each long sentence as two or three complete sentences and proofread carefully for pronouns, apostrophes, and verb agreement.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking friend to tell them about it. In your letter:
- Explain why you have moved
- Describe the new apartment
- Invite him to pay a visit
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