You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information. In your letter: - ask about the dates, - ask about the program, - ask about accommodation - ask about the cost.
Sample Response
Dear Sir/Madam,Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to you to request further informationseek additional information aboutin relation to the project management seminar that your company will holdis going to conduct this year.
Since I have receivedhave been receiving considerablea lot of positive feedback about your last year’s seminarseminars from some of my colleagues who attended itwho have attended it, I am very interested in participatingI would very much like to participate in this year’s seminar. To plan my attendanceTo materialize my intention, Could you pleaseI would like you to please provide me with detailsprovide me details about the following:
– Dates on which the seminar is being conducted.
– A detailed agenda.
– Options for accommodation.
– The cost of the seminar with and without accommodation.
Once I am supplied with the requested information, I will be able to assess whetherif it is feasible for me to attend the seminar. I look forward towould be eagerly waiting for your response and I hope you have a suitablegood package to offer me. Thank you.
Yours faithfullyFaithfully,
Irfan
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter has a clear inquiry purpose, requests all four categories of information, and follows an easy-to-understand formal progression. Its main weakness is that several expressions are awkward or overly elaborate, while the list format leaves some requests minimally developed; the priority is to phrase each question naturally and specify the information needed in slightly more detail.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All requested areas are covered clearly, and the reason for needing the information is relevant and appropriate.
Develop each request slightly by asking for specific details such as the seminar schedule and accommodation arrangements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical sequence from introduction and motivation to requests and closing, although the list feels somewhat mechanical.
Integrate the requests into connected prose or group them into a more naturally developed paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is a useful range of formal vocabulary, but several collocations are strained or unnatural.
Replace phrases such as materialize my intention and be eagerly waiting with simpler, idiomatic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are generally controlled and most sentences are accurate, with a few noticeable tense and reference errors.
Review tense consistency and pronoun agreement, particularly when referring to past seminars and colleagues.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information. In your letter:
- ask about the dates,
- ask about the program,
- ask about accommodation
- ask about the cost.
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