You would like to enrol in a qualification course. Write a letter to the person in charge of the course. In your letter: - ask for details about the course - ask about the fees - ask about the prerequisites

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Caroline Norton, writing to request some information about the two-year diploma programmeprogram in architectural design that your institute offers. I am keen to enrol in this courseget registered in this course and therefore requirethat is why require further information about the programmefurther information regarding it. Regarding the programmeIn relation to the course, I learned about the course from an advertisement published in a local newspaper, but unfortunatelysadly, I did not find all the details. Firstly, I would like to ask whether this is a full-time or part-time courseif this is a full-time or a part-time course and which architecture subjectswhich subjects of architecture are included in it? Furthermore, does the programme providedoes it provide practical training for participantsto the participants? AdditionallyAnd, could you please tell mecan you please inform me of the total course feetotal cost of the course? Lastly, is there any previous qualification related to the architecture required for eligibility? I will be very gratefulvery grateful to you if you couldkindly send me these details as I am really hoping to enrol in the programmeget enrolled in it. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Caroline Norton

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter fully addresses the requested course details, fees, and prerequisites in a consistently appropriate formal tone, and its purpose is immediately clear. Its main limitation is presentation: the entire response is compressed into one paragraph and several linking expressions and phrases sound mechanical or awkward; dividing the requests into purposeful paragraphs and refining collocations would make the message more polished and easier to follow.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are fully covered, and the formal tone is appropriate throughout.

Next step

Briefly explain how each requested detail would affect your enrolment decision to deepen the development further.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The requests progress logically, but the single-block presentation and mechanical sequencing limit organisational clarity.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for course details, fees, and prerequisites, with less reliance on sequencing words.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is sufficiently varied and precise for the purpose, although a few phrases such as ‘get registered’ sound unnatural.

Next step

Refine collocations by choosing natural formal phrases such as ‘enrol on the course’ and ‘relevant qualifications’.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A useful range of complex structures is mostly accurate, but the missing subject in ‘that is why require’ and awkward question structures reduce control.

Next step

Proofread every clause for complete subject-verb structure and frame embedded questions consistently.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You would like to enrol in a qualification course. Write a letter to the person in charge of the course. In your letter:

- ask for details about the course

- ask about the fees

- ask about the prerequisites

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