You are working for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Describe why you want to take the course. - Explain how it will be beneficial to the company. - Tell who will be managing your work in your absence.
Sample Response
Dear Mr. Kapoor,
I am writing to request your approval to attend an online course on effective coding and web design. As a developer on your team for the past two years, I am committedyears, I’m committed to staying current with industry advancements. This course, runningoffered from July 7, 2024, to September 10, 2024, will require a commitment of two hours a daydaily dedication of two hours.
Having witnessed the company’s growth and development over the past two years, I am eageryears, I’m eager to contribute even more effectively. This online program presents a valuable opportunity to sharpen my skills, allowing me to deliver bettersuperior results for our clients. The training costs approximately $100. I understand that company training funds may not be available for this course, but I would be happy to discuss funding options if possible.
To minimize workload disruption, I will ensure minimal impact during my absence. I can discuss coverage with my team members beforehand to ensure continuity of our workseamless continuation of tasks. Additionally, I am happy to conduct a session upon completion to share what I have learnedshare the acquired knowledge with the team.
Yours sincerely,
Aman Gupta
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter is professionally organized and uses controlled, appropriately formal language to explain the course and its benefits. However, it does not fulfill the request to identify who will manage the writer's work, referring only vaguely to team members and future discussions about coverage. The most important improvement is to name a specific colleague or role and explain the concrete handover arrangement during the absence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose and first two bullet points are developed clearly, but the required person responsible for the writer's work is not identified.
Name the colleague or manager who will take over and state how the relevant duties will be handed over.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter follows a logical paragraph structure, and linking helps the request progress clearly from rationale to practical arrangements.
Make the final body paragraph more direct by replacing repeated disruption language with a concise sequence of handover actions.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and suitably formal, although a few combinations such as daily dedication sound less natural than the surrounding language.
Use more idiomatic workplace phrasing, such as requiring two hours each day and arranging cover for ongoing tasks.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a wide range of sentence forms with strong control and only minor lapses that do not impede meaning.
Review sentence phrasing for concision so that complex structures remain precise and free from unnecessary repetition.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are working for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- Describe why you want to take the course.
- Explain how it will be beneficial to the company.
- Tell who will be managing your work in your absence.
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