You are going on holiday and would like to stay in the same hotel as you did on your last visit. Write to the hotel. In your letter: - Explain why you have chosen to visit the same hotel? - Give them the details of your stay? - Ask them about any events in the area during your stay.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Ankitha, a software engineer from Chennai. I plan to take a trip to Kashmir with my companions, and I would like to stay at Le Meridian hotel.
Last year, I stayed at your lodge when I came to Kashmir for the first time with my family. We were quite impressed by the hospitality of your employees. The complimentary breakfast had a diverse range of international recipes with a pinch of Indian flavours that was absolutely scrumptious. The rooms were luxurious, convenient and had spectacular views of mountains. Furthermore, we were captivated by the amenities provided, such as the gym, swimming pool and yoga centre inside the hotel, free of cost. Overall, it was a fantastic stay at your place.
Moreover, I would like to reserve three rooms for five days. We will reach Srinagar airport by 11 AM, check in around 1 PM on June 25, and check out on June 30. I would be highly obliged if you could provide some discounts since we are a group of 6 people.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Keep the venue consistent Original: lodge Suggested revision: hotel Why it matters: The task and the rest of the letter refer to the property as a hotel.
- 2. Correct parallel structure Original: luxurious, convenient and had Suggested revision: luxurious and comfortable, and they had Why it matters: The revision coordinates the adjectives and the following clause correctly.
- 3. Add the definite article Original: views of mountains Suggested revision: views of the mountains Why it matters: The definite article suits the identifiable mountains seen from the hotel.
- 4. Signal the booking details Original: Moreover Suggested revision: For my upcoming visit Why it matters: This transition clearly marks the move from the previous stay to the new booking.
- 5. Correct arrival phrasing Original: reach Srinagar airport Suggested revision: arrive at Srinagar Airport Why it matters: Use “arrive at” with a specific airport.
- 6. Make the request specific Original: some discounts Suggested revision: a group discount Why it matters: This phrase states the type of discount relevant to six guests.
- 7. Sentence rewrite Original: The complimentary breakfast had a diverse range of international recipes with a pinch of Indian flavours that was absolutely scrumptious. Suggested revision: The complimentary breakfast offered a diverse range of scrumptious international dishes with Indian flavours. Why it matters: The rewrite replaces “recipes” with the food actually served and removes the unclear relative clause.
- 8. Sentence rewrite Original: Furthermore, we were captivated by the amenities provided, such as the gym, swimming pool and yoga centre inside the hotel, free of cost. Suggested revision: Furthermore, we enjoyed the free on-site amenities, including the gym, swimming pool and yoga centre. Why it matters: This rewrite corrects the misplaced phrase “free of cost” and makes the sentence more direct.
- 9. Ask about local events Suggested revision: Add a direct question about any local events taking place between 25 and 30 June. Why it matters: The response does not address the prompt’s third bullet point about events during the stay.
- 10. Complete the letter ending Suggested revision: End with a polite request for confirmation and a suitable sign-off. Why it matters: A formal closing would complete the communicative structure of the hotel enquiry.
Suggested Rewrites
- lodge hotel
- luxurious, convenient and had luxurious and comfortable, and they had
- views of mountains views of the mountains
- Moreover For my upcoming visit
- reach Srinagar airport arrive at Srinagar Airport
- some discounts a group discount
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter is easy to follow and uses varied, generally accurate language to explain the return visit and provide detailed booking information. However, it entirely omits the requested enquiry about events in the area and ends without a closing request or sign-off, so the communicative task is incomplete. The essential improvement is to add a polite events enquiry and a conventional closing paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The reasons for returning and the stay details are well developed, but the required question about local events is completely missing.
Add a direct, polite request for information about events during June 25 to June 30 and finish the letter conventionally.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses clearly from the purpose to reasons and booking details, with effective paragraphing and linking.
Add a final paragraph for the events enquiry and closing request so the letter reaches a complete conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and often vivid, though a few choices such as recipes, convenient rooms, and highly obliged are slightly unnatural.
Prefer natural hotel collocations such as dishes, comfortable rooms, and I would appreciate it if.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter uses a good range of complex sentences with generally accurate grammar and only occasional awkward constructions.
Refine article and modifier use in phrases such as views of the mountains and amenities available free of charge.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on holiday and would like to stay in the same hotel as you did on your last visit. Write to the hotel. In your letter:
- Explain why you have chosen to visit the same hotel?
- Give them the details of your stay?
- Ask them about any events in the area during your stay.
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