You want to sell your television. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain: - why you are selling the television - describe the television - suggest a date - when your friend can come and see it
Sample Response
Dear Rabbi, Hope you are doing well. I have recently got a job offer in New York and I am excited about it. I am planning to leave next month and would like to meet you sometime before my departure. I have decided not to ship my furniture to my destination. Instead, I want to sell itsell them off. I think you might be interested in purchasinginterested to purchase my smart TV. The TV I own is an ultra-slim Samsung LED television and I purchased it around 6 months ago. It still has a further 18 months of warrantywarranty for 1 and a half years. I boughtbrought it from an authorized Samsung showrooma branded Samsung showroom and it is a 43-inch43 inch Android TV. The outstanding features of this TV are 3D viewing3-Dimensional view (3D), smart internet connection, the latest Android OSlatest Android OS, 256 GB internal memory, a 10-year picture-panel warranty10 years picture panel warranty and voice activation. I believe you would be interested in buyinginterested to have this TV. However,TV, however, I suggest that you haveI advise you to have a demonstration of how it worksa clear demonstration of the functional and operational procedures of it. Youyou can come to check it out next Saturday, 28th Marchnext weekend, Saturday, 28th March. We can also negotiate the price at the same time. PleaseKindly reply to me with your thoughts on buying this television. Hope to hear from you soon. Warm wishes, Ramesh Roy
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear communicative purpose and detailed television description, with the reason for selling and a viewing date both covered in a friendly letter. Its main limitation is dense presentation and occasionally awkward or overformal wording, while the viewing arrangement gives no time of day. Prioritise paragraphing the letter by purpose and stating a specific viewing time in natural language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter explains the move, describes the television extensively and proposes Saturday 28 March, with a generally suitable friendly tone, but the viewing time remains unspecified.
Add a specific time or time window for the visit and keep the product description focused on the most relevant selling points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a logical sequence from the move to the television, viewing and reply, but the entire letter is one dense paragraph and the long feature list interrupts flow.
Use short paragraphs for the reason for selling, the television description and the viewing arrangements.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for describing the television and arrangements, but collocations such as “interested to purchase,” “branded showroom” and “procedures of it” are unnatural.
Use natural phrases such as “interested in buying,” “authorised showroom,” and “show you how it works.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A useful range of structures is mostly controlled, though pronoun reference, comma splices, missing articles, hyphenation and the lowercase “you” cause recurring lapses.
Correct “furniture” to a singular reference, split the comma splice before “however,” and write forms such as “43-inch TV” and “You can.”
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You want to sell your television. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain:
- why you are selling the television
- describe the television
- suggest a date
- when your friend can come and see it
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.