You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: - explain why you have changed your job - describe your new job - tell him/her your other news
Sample Response
HiDear Shourya,
I am reallyso happy to hear that you have returned from your tripreturned from your trip now. Guess what? I have exciting news to share. I have exciting news to share. I have started working at AKS Group and left my previous job to advance my career and this position provides the perfect opportunity for me.
I have joined the company as a manager and overseejoined as a manager where I look into the logistics operations and coordinate supply chains.The atmosphere at workThe work environment is excellentstupendous since my colleagues have been incredibly supportive, which has made the transition much easier. The company also offersprovides excellent learning opportunities, soopportunities so I am really excitedquite enthusiastic about what lies ahead.
My life outside of work currently experiences positive developments. I moved to a new apartment, whicha new apartment which is closer to my officebrings me closer to my office so my commute has become much easiertravel has become much easier. I am planning to take a shortsmall trip next month, butnext month but I would love to meet you before that.
With loveLove,
Swetha M.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter covers the job change, new responsibilities, and personal news in a clear sequence, while maintaining a generally friendly relationship with the reader. Its main limitation is that repeated content and several overly formal or unnatural expressions make the message less spontaneous and precise. The highest-priority improvement is to use simpler, more idiomatic language and remove repetition so the informal tone feels consistently natural.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three required points are covered with relevant supporting detail, and the personal framing generally suits a letter to a friend.
Use a more consistently informal voice and develop the reason for leaving the previous job with one specific personal detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a sensible paragraph sequence, but the repeated opening sentence and some heavily coordinated sentences reduce smoothness.
Delete the duplicated sentence and use shorter transitions to connect the job news, workplace description, and personal update.
Lexical Resource
There is a useful range of vocabulary, but choices such as “stupendous” and “experiences positive developments” are unnatural in this friendly context.
Prefer precise everyday expressions, for example describing the environment as welcoming and saying that life outside work is also going well.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses several complex structures successfully, although awkward relative constructions and long coordinated clauses occasionally reduce naturalness.
Revise sentences such as the description of joining as a manager, and check spacing and clause boundaries carefully.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter:
- explain why you have changed your job
- describe your new job
- tell him/her your other news
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