You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for threemonths over the summer. Write a letter to the Manager. In your letter: - say what experience you have - ask what the work involves - enquire about conditions
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,Dear Sir, I am writing to enquire about the part-time waiter positionpart-time position as a waiter advertised in 'The Evening Echo' on 24th June. I am looking for work during July and Augustin the months of July and August when I am on university vacationbecause my university vacation is then. I have considerable experiencequite a lot of experience in the hospitality industryhotel business, as I workedwas working in a guesthouse last year. The job involved dealing with guestsgeusts, and I very much enjoyed the workI very much enjoyed it. I can supply references fromof my previous employer if requiredif you require them. Could you please let me know what duties the position involveswhat this position involves? At the guesthouse, I worked as a porter and also didalso I did some work as a waiter in the restaurant, so I would be interested in either of these jobs. Could you give me an idea of the working hours? I am available at the weekends as well as during the week, and I can work any hours. However, I would prefer daytime hours rather than shiftsdaytime to shifts, if possible. Could you also tell me about accommodation for employees and what the rate of pay is?how much you pay. I would appreciate hearing from you. Yours faithfully, [Your full name]Yours faithfully
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter addresses every required point directly, with a clear purpose, relevant hotel experience, and an appropriately polite professional tone. Its main limitation is presentation: the ideas are delivered in one unbroken block, while a few awkward collocations and minor accuracy slips reduce polish. Organise the content into purposeful paragraphs and refine phrases such as the reference and shift requests for a more natural, precise application.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are covered, and the formal tone suits an enquiry to a manager.
Develop the conditions enquiry slightly further by asking about specific matters such as pay arrangements or contract dates.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from availability and experience to duties and employment conditions, with generally natural linking.
Use separate paragraphs for experience, the role itself, and employment conditions to make the structure easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied and appropriate for a formal job enquiry, although a few collocations and one spelling error reduce precision.
Proofread word choice carefully and use natural phrases such as references from a previous employer and daytime work rather than shifts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex structures is handled accurately enough for effortless understanding, with only occasional awkward constructions and punctuation slips.
Refine clause structure in phrases such as also I did some work and check punctuation at the ends of indirect questions.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for threemonths over the summer. Write a letter to the Manager. In your letter:
- say what experience you have
- ask what the work involves
- enquire about conditions
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