Band 7.0 IELTS General Training Writing Task 1 Correction

You went to another city for a training course and stayed at a friend's house for a week. They have been great hosts. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - thank them for having you at their house for a week - express your gratitude for their hospitality - say how much you miss them

Sample Response

Dear Robert, Hope all is well at your end. I'm also carrying on well with my life and works. Anyway, I just wanted to let you know how grateful and thankful I really am for allowing me to stay at your house for the whole week in order to help me attend the training course in the last month. After all, it would have been really difficult for me to find another suitable place on such short notice since I was informed about the training programme only just a few days before the start of the training. I'm also very much grateful for the kind and generous hospitality that were shown to me by your entire family. I especially enjoyed my afternoon snack time with your whole family after returning from my training. Besides, I also liked how you took me to do fishing at a nearby lake during the weekend while making a video of it. In fact, during that one week of stay at your place, I very much felt like a part of your great family, so no wonder that I miss all of you after leaving your city. Please send my gratitude to everyone in your family. Warm wishes, Thomas

IELTS Writing Correction

  • 1. Separate greeting Original: Dear Robert, Hope Suggested revision: Dear Robert, I hope Why it matters: The salutation and first sentence should be separated.
  • 2. Natural phrase Original: at your end Suggested revision: with you Why it matters: This expression sounds less natural in this friendly opening.
  • 3. Noun form Original: my life and works Suggested revision: my life and work Why it matters: Work is usually uncountable in this sense.
  • 4. Remove filler Original: Anyway, I just wanted Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: Anyway weakens the transition into the purpose of the letter.
  • 5. Avoid repetition Original: grateful and thankful Suggested revision: grateful Why it matters: The two adjectives repeat the same idea.
  • 6. Concise phrase Original: for the whole week Suggested revision: for a whole week Why it matters: This is a more natural phrase here.
  • 7. Simpler purpose Original: in order to help me attend Suggested revision: so I could attend Why it matters: This is shorter and more conversational.
  • 8. Time phrase Original: in the last month Suggested revision: last month Why it matters: The preposition is unnecessary.
  • 9. Smoother link Original: After all, Suggested revision: As you know, Why it matters: After all is slightly argumentative in this context.
  • 10. Reduce redundancy Original: only just a few days Suggested revision: only a few days Why it matters: Only just is redundant here.
  • 11. Natural phrase Original: very much grateful Suggested revision: very grateful Why it matters: Very much grateful is not idiomatic.
  • 12. Agreement Original: hospitality that were shown Suggested revision: hospitality that was shown Why it matters: Hospitality is singular, so use was.

Suggested Rewrites

  • Dear Robert, Hope Dear Robert, I hope
  • at your end with you
  • my life and works my life and work
  • Anyway, I just wanted Delete
  • grateful and thankful grateful
  • for the whole week for a whole week
Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.

TA

Task Achievement

7.5
Feedback

The letter thanks the friend, describes hospitality, and says the writer misses them. The informal purpose is achieved well.

Next step

Make the “I miss you” point more direct and personal near the end.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Feedback

The response is warm and coherent, but one long paragraph weakens organisation.

Next step

Use paragraphs for thanks, hospitality details, memories, and missing the family.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Feedback

Vocabulary is flexible and friendly, though some phrases are redundant or unnatural.

Next step

Avoid double expressions such as “grateful and thankful”.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Feedback

There is a range of sentence forms, but errors with prepositions, plural nouns, and agreement appear.

Next step

Check agreement with abstract nouns and gerund phrases after “go”.