As part of your study you have worked for a short period of time in a company. Write a letter to the manager of this company. In your letter: - Thank him/her for the opportunity - Explain how the experience gained there has helped you - Share your plans for the future.
Sample Response
Dear Mr. David,
I am writing to sayI am writing this letter to send you a note to say how much I appreciate the opportunity you have given me.
DeleteI am sure that I gained a great deal of useful knowledgeI have got a great deal of useful knowledge relevantrelated to my profession. I am convinced that this chance to work with a team of professionals in your company has helped me to broaden my horizons and your assistance has been invaluable to me. DeleteI would definitely say that this experience enabledallowed me to produce an excellent degree project at my universitymake the best degree project in my university and, as a consequence, get a joband as a consequence to get a job in a well-known construction company.
At the moment, I work as an engineer and I plan toI am planning to continuekeep developing professionally. Next month I willNext month I am going to take a course in low-current systems designtake the course of projecting of low-current systems. I believe that it will help me to collaboratecooperate with other relevant departmentsrelated departments more effectively.
So, in the end I would like to say that I would be grateful if we can communicate regarding our professional field in the future.
Yours sincerely,
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fulfils its purpose convincingly by expressing gratitude, explaining concrete benefits from the placement, and outlining credible professional plans in a consistently courteous tone. It is logically structured and displays a broad vocabulary, though several awkward collocations and an overextended sentence reduce precision and fluency. The priority is to express the degree project, technical course, and future professional contact in more natural English.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are clearly covered with relevant supporting detail, and the appreciative professional tone suits the manager relationship.
Make the final request for future contact more specific by stating the kind of professional exchange the writer hopes to maintain.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter follows a clear progression from thanks to gained benefits and future plans, with effective paragraphing.
Break up the long experience paragraph and use a more direct transition into the closing request.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of professional vocabulary, but several phrases are noticeably unnatural or imprecise.
Choose more idiomatic wording for completing a degree project, taking a technical course, and staying in professional contact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are used frequently and usually accurately, with minor problems in coordination, prepositions, and conditional phrasing.
Tighten long coordinated sentences and check preposition patterns and polite conditional forms during proofreading.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
As part of your study you have worked for a short period of time in a company. Write a letter to the manager of this company. In your letter:
- Thank him/her for the opportunity
- Explain how the experience gained there has helped you
- Share your plans for the future.
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