You need a translation of a document into a different language. you have a friend who speaks that language. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - explain what the document is and why you need a translation - explain why is in urgent and important for you - ask your friend if and when he/she will be able to help you
Sample Response
Dear Chen, I was just thinking about you the other day when i saw the Jackie Chan movie in the theaters. Anyways, i was just wondering if you could give me a hand with translating a letter from Chinese to English. The document I need your help with is my university admission letter in the Beijing University of technology for my masters in Beijing,China.As it also has the banking details and the amount of fees which i have to pay, as a part of my admission procedure. Due to the fact that the deadline to pay the full fee will end in a week's time I want to make sure that i have the translation before that. Moreover, if I fail to do that for any reason then, my admission at the university will be cancelled and as you already know that studying at this university is one of my dreams. I wouldn't have stressed you more, as I'm aware of your busy working schedule but keeping the urgency in mind please let me know if it's possible for you to translate it and if so then, when can i pop up at your house to get this thing done? I'll be anxiously waiting for your reply. Best regards, Adam
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Capitalise the pronoun Original: i Suggested revision: I Why it matters: The first-person pronoun must always be capitalised.
- 2. Use standard wording Original: Anyways Suggested revision: Anyway Why it matters: Anyway is the standard form and still suits the informal tone.
- 3. Capitalise the pronoun Original: i Suggested revision: I Why it matters: The first-person pronoun must always be capitalised.
- 4. Correct the preposition Original: admission letter in the Beijing University of technology Suggested revision: admission letter from Beijing University of Technology Why it matters: A letter comes from an institution, and the proper name requires capitalisation.
- 5. Use possessive form Original: my masters Suggested revision: my master's degree Why it matters: Master's needs the possessive form when referring to the degree.
- 6. Repair the fragment Original: Beijing,China.As Suggested revision: Beijing, China. It Why it matters: This change turns the following dependent fragment into a complete sentence.
- 7. Use concise wording Original: the amount of fees Suggested revision: the fee amount Why it matters: Fee amount expresses the intended meaning without the awkward plural construction.
- 8. Capitalise the pronoun Original: i Suggested revision: I Why it matters: The first-person pronoun must always be capitalised.
- 9. Use natural phrasing Original: , as a part of my admission procedure Suggested revision: as part of my admission process Why it matters: As part of my admission process is more concise and idiomatic.
- 10. Clarify the deadline Original: Due to the fact that the deadline to pay the full fee will end in a week's time Suggested revision: Since the deadline for paying the full fee is in a week's time, Why it matters: This revision expresses the time pressure clearly and links it correctly to the main clause.
- 11. Capitalise the pronoun Original: i Suggested revision: I Why it matters: The first-person pronoun must always be capitalised.
- 12. Show the consequence Original: Moreover Suggested revision: Otherwise Why it matters: Otherwise correctly introduces what will happen if the deadline is missed.
Suggested Rewrites
- i I
- Anyways Anyway
- i I
- admission letter in the Beijing University of technology admission letter from Beijing University of Technology
- my masters my master's degree
- Beijing,China.As Beijing, China. It
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is that it covers the document, the deadline, the consequences, and the request for help in a suitably friendly voice. Its main limitation is weak sentence control: fragments, run-ons, punctuation problems, and awkward phrasing repeatedly disrupt the flow. The highest-priority improvement is to recast the long middle section as several complete, clearly punctuated sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter clearly explains the document, its urgency and importance, and the requested help while maintaining an informal relationship with the friend.
State more directly at the start that the admission letter must be translated so the fees can be paid correctly and on time.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a sensible sequence, but one-block presentation and overloaded sentences make the progression less smooth.
Use separate paragraphs for the document, the urgency, and the request, with one main idea in each sentence.
Lexical Resource
The response uses adequate topic-specific vocabulary, though several collocations and informal expressions are awkward or imprecise.
Replace unnatural phrases with idiomatic alternatives, such as saying the deadline is in a week and asking when to come over.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but capitalization, article, clause, and punctuation errors recur across the response.
Check every sentence for a complete main clause, correct capitalization, and clear punctuation before adding subordinate details.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You need a translation of a document into a different language. you have a friend who speaks that language. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
- explain what the document is and why you need a translation
- explain why is in urgent and important for you
- ask your friend if and when he/she will be able to help you
Your response
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