You are going on holiday and you would like to hire a car. One of your parties is in a wheelchair. Write a letter to a car hire company. In your letter: - explain the reason you need the car - describe the type of car you need - ask what the price is and what it includes
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am planning to organise a trip for my family to Manali during the upcoming summer holiday and would therefore like to hireand for this, I want to hire a vehiclefour-wheeler. I am writing to inquire about the availability of an eight-seater SUV within the time period of 5th to 10th November 2025. First, I would like to inform you that my grandfather is in a wheelchair and he will also be accompanying us on the triphe is also escorting us on the trip. Therefore, the vehicleHence the vehicle should be spacious enough as the comfort of the passengers is the top priorityforemost consideration for us. Moreover, we have never been to Manali and we are unfamiliar with the local roadstotally unaware of the road maps. A car with a GPRS facility will be highly appreciated in this situation. FinallyAnd finally, I hope that Deletethere is no need to mention that we are expecting an air-conditioned vehicleAC drive in this hot summer. Please confirm the availability of the vehicle withcomprising of the aforementioned amenities or, if it is unavailable, details of a suitable alternativeor an alternative with details, in the case of unavailability. I would be grateful if you can provide a quotation for the hireprovide the quote for the same. Also, I am looking forward to hearing about any discount you offerany concession from your side for booking the car well in advance and paying in cashon the reservation of the car well in advance with cash payment. In anticipation of hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Amita Rukhanee
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter has a clear formal purpose and gives useful detail about the trip, the passenger's wheelchair, and the required vehicle. Its main limitation is that the request for a price does not clearly ask what the charge includes, while several awkward expressions and the absence of paragraph breaks reduce polish. Prioritise an explicit question about inclusions and organise the requests into clear paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose and most requirements are clearly addressed with relevant details about the trip, wheelchair user, and vehicle features.
Ask explicitly what the quoted price includes, such as insurance, fuel, mileage, or additional fees.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information follows a generally logical sequence, but the single dense paragraph and occasional abrupt linking weaken readability.
Divide the letter into short paragraphs for the trip context, vehicle requirements, and price enquiry.
Lexical Resource
The letter demonstrates a reasonably varied formal vocabulary, though several collocations such as "AC drive" and "concession from your side" are unnatural.
Use more precise hire-related phrases such as "air-conditioned vehicle," "discount," and "quotation."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures conveys the message clearly, despite recurring article, preposition, and phrasing errors and a closing fragment.
Review complex sentences for complete clauses and accurate patterns, especially "comprising" without "of" and conditional requests.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on holiday and you would like to hire a car. One of your parties is in a wheelchair. Write a letter to a car hire company. In your letter:
- explain the reason you need the car
- describe the type of car you need
- ask what the price is and what it includes
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